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Eternal Night
Contributed by
Miane
on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 07:03:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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The stale, cold moonlight
stabs at my stone cold heart
laughing down at my sorrow
showing my failure to all
the burning aching moonlight
pulling my heart through my chest
stripping me naked then leave me
helplessly trapped in myself
Copyright ©
Miane
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2004-11-10 07:03:40]
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Re: Eternal Night
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 07:16:20 AM AEST
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Nice stuff. Very impressive first post.
Stitch |
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Re: Eternal Night
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 08:15:29 AM AEST
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I do like it.
it might flow better if you changed the 7th line to something like;
"stripped naked then leaving me"
but otherwise it shows powerand talent.
Great job! |
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Re: Eternal Night
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by KiMiNE on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 08:22:01 AM AEST
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| very nice...I like your style |
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Re: Eternal Night
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd August 2006 @ 12:33:17 PM AEST
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beautiful. i love it!
i like the short&sweet style you have to it...wonderful.
- Bethani - |
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