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When You See Me Look Away
Contributed by
wordpoet
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Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 09:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Hidden from the world, inside this bitter shell,
Lies the person that I am, enduring your sweet hell.
Longing for each moment, I die ‘cause we’re apart,
And my love for you lies bleeding, dashed within my heart.
Dead I am but forced to watch as life continues on,
The hopes and dreams that I held dear, suddenly are gone.
I’m powerless to change my fate, there’s nothing I can do,
The only thing I’ll ever want is to spend my life with you.
It’s difficult when I’m near you, knowing how I feel,
And the effort that it takes to smile sometimes is unreal.
But because you mean so much to me, these hardships I endure,
Your happiness means more to me than any heartaches cure.
I’d give up all I have for you, no price I wouldn’t pay,
But I sacrifice all that I am, for you it’s best this way.
So when you see me turn my head, I hope you realize,
What I’m trying to hide from you is that a part of me still dies.
By: Doug Morton
http://wordpoet.tripod.com
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Re: When You See Me Look Away
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by Rakerman1999 on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 09:08:29 AM AEST
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| Excellent write Doug ! I can feel the hurt in this one. Well done ! |
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Re: When You See Me Look Away
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 11:51:42 AM AEST
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Doug, this is so sad, but really a lovely poem... Love the title...it says a whole lot...
Jenni |
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Re: When You See Me Look Away
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 01:14:15 PM AEST
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I agree with Jenni,
Sad but very good!
PEACE, LUV,
emy |
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Re: When You See Me Look Away
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by OreO on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 01:21:36 PM AEST
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Absolutely beautifully written,
this one made me cry real hard
it's so full of love and passion
and longing for so much more..
The desire in this is so overwhelming
it touched my heart and soul very
deeply, Thank you for sharing this
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::.
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Re: When You See Me Look Away
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by DreamWeaver on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 02:36:28 PM AEST
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| Wonderful write .... such emotion. I love the last two lines ... I can feel the pain along with you. |
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Re: When You See Me Look Away
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by MoonlitAngel on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 05:44:04 PM AEST
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Beautifully tragic poem. I know how you feel. Sweet hell...my favourite place to vacation.
Wonderfully written. It touches a nerve.
~ MoonlitAngel |
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Re: When You See Me Look Away
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by juliette on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 04:06:02 AM AEST
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You always make me cry!!!!!!!!!!!!
But it's okay - I forgive you - =)
This is a great write - Keep them coming!
Juliette |
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Re: When You See Me Look Away
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by tiger_babyj on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 05:16:09 AM AEST
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| This is very heartfelt.I love it.Great job.It touched me very much.i look forward to hearing more |
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Re: When You See Me Look Away
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by darkeyedman on
Sunday, 24th November 2002 @ 09:59:36 PM AEST
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| this was wonderful!! |
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Re: When You See Me Look Away
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by TeenageEmoGirl on
Thursday, 3rd July 2003 @ 12:16:03 AM AEST
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| i love this poem, i think anyone can identify with it, really good job with the expressions... i feel ya pain brotha' |
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