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Vehement Flame
Contributed by
wachumiri
on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 03:36:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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As swift as anger
Sure as death
As bright as light
Life-giving breath
As strong as stone
Undaunted stands
As wide as skies
Across the lands
As fire's passion
Burning flame
This battered blade
Always remains
The seed of hope
Sprouting strong
Love will last
Through ages long
Copyright ©
wachumiri
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2004-11-08 15:36:19] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Vehement Flame
(User Rating: 1 ) by Wachumiri on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 03:36:55 PM AEST (User
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Set me as a seal upon your heart
As a seal upon your arm
Love is as strong as death
Jealousy is as strong as the grave
Its flames are flames of fire
A most vehement flame
Many waters cannot quench love
Nor can the floods drown it |
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Re: Vehement Flame
(User Rating: 1 ) by faith_my_eyes on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 07:04:26 PM AEST (User
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Incredible write David! |
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Re: Vehement Flame
(User Rating: 1 ) by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 10th November 2004 @ 09:34:27 AM AEST (User
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Very nicely done. The alliterations were amazing and the comparisons incredible. I commend you....and love you.
~Carrie~ |
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Re: Vehement Flame
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 03:51:30 AM AEST (User
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Bravo! Tis a piece well written, o friend.
Perhaps "True Love" would be better for the penultimate line? It would keep the rhythm.
*chuckles at knowledge that David willnae get the penultimate-word... or did I tell him what it meant some time or other? Could have*
Andrew |
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Re: Vehement Flame
(User Rating: 1 ) by Tanmaya on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 12:49:41 AM AEST (User
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Ecxellent words...
Powerful and noble. |
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Re: Vehement Flame
(User Rating: 1 ) by anitajames on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 10:25:02 AM AEST (User
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OK. I'm starting to notice that our poems are very similar in theme. We have good taste, no? I loved this one. The last stanza is my favorite,I can't help but smile. |
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Re: Vehement Flame
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 07:20:21 PM AEST (User
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WoW this is a smashing piece of poetry dear David. Your heart and Talent shine radiantly through this poem. Simply blew me away with this one. Sue stands up and applauds David. Well done.
*hugs*
Sue |
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