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Bang Bang
Contributed by
pixie
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Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 01:04:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Bang, bang I shoot you dead,
You were the one who messed with my head,
But not anymore you are no longer alive,
Into death I made you take a dive.
I have wanted to kill you for so long,
My bullets have longed to whistle their song,
Night after night I have wept over the pain you caused,
So from breathing I wanted to give you a permanent pause.
I didn’t even shed a single tear,
Something died with you & that was my fear,
So I couldn’t be happier that you inhaled your last,
Breath as now you are not my present, but past.
You laughed at me for too many days,
I knew I’d bring death your way,
I can’t help but smile & let out a little laugh
As now in the devils water you will take a bath.
I pray that never will you be at rest,
To make you suffer was m only quest,
Now my mission has been accomplished,
To you a heavy dose of death has been dished.
Copyright ©
pixie
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2004-11-08 13:04:25]
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Re: Bang Bang
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 01:08:49 PM AEST
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Yay! Go Krissie!
I like this hunni...but tell me..does this have any truth in it?
I hope not.
Another fabulous write.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Bang Bang
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by Stitch on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 01:18:02 PM AEST
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Ouch! Sounds like a write you needed for the catharsis. Well done.
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Re: Bang Bang
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by EternalNight4x on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 02:15:04 PM AEST
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| wow that's really good, I liek your ryhming and that poem does have a lot fo truth to it...wouldn't it be awesome to actual be able to do it without rotting in jail the rest of your life lol..... |
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Re: Bang Bang
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by deathdrop on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 03:24:14 PM AEST
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oooh!
an angry poem if it's true, i hope this venting has helped you... and how are things now?
i hope they're getting better.
*hugs*
from rosie. |
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Re: Bang Bang
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by CrimsonTears on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 03:58:47 PM AEST
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I like this alot....great job...very powerful...
Lots of Love
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Re: Bang Bang
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by BrandySwanson on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 05:55:18 PM AEST
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I just love the ryhming in this poem lots of angry feeling as well. Great job and well written. take care pixie and it was a pleasure being able to read all your wonderful and terrific poems. I enjoyed reading them.
Your #1 fan
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Re: Bang Bang
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by Willofree on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 06:19:21 PM AEST
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Poetry is a great outlet for expressing anger or hatred. We can deal with all kinds or unfinished business throuogh this mode of expression.
You did a fabulous job of expressing your disdain for this person.
Good write, I hope it brings healing
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Re: Bang Bang
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by pander on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 06:57:22 PM AEST
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Another nice piece, full of emotion.
What more can I say?
Luv,
Pander
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Re: Bang Bang
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 07:07:37 PM AEST
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Very emotional write.... Good venting.....Hope all is well....
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Bang Bang
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by girltranscended on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 11:31:59 PM AEST
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This was great.
I have a certain someone I would like to make suffer as well...
"my bullets have longed to whistle their song"
is an awesome line!
I luv the strength of your voice :) |
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