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The autumn light is painted.
Contributed by
nataku
on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 02:44:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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The autumn light is painted
Across the dimming sky
And laughter of the children
Fade away and die
The corners of the world
Collapse the corners of my mind
And the sense of direction
Like reality, is blind
My body is floating
As my soul is torn away
I already feel the wind lift
The world and all its weight
And with what strength I have
I’ll muster up to try
And hopefully I’ll smile
Before I hit the ground and die
Copyright ©
nataku
... [
2004-11-05 02:44:00]
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Re: The autumn light is painted.
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 03:40:27 AM AEST
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| awesome, i love it!!! |
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Re: The autumn light is painted.
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by a_bear on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 04:15:17 AM AEST
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| Autumn is my favorite season..I was hoping for a brighter end to the poem..but overall..good write. |
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Re: The autumn light is painted.
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by pixie on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 06:01:48 AM AEST
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a suicide poe, none the less., but written beautifully, this is quite gentle, great write,
takecare,
pixie xx |
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Re: The autumn light is painted.
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 06:25:07 AM AEST
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| Unique rythem and flow, vivid and full of feeling cool write. |
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Re: The autumn light is painted.
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by bonita2689 on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 09:20:56 AM AEST
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| beautiful mental pictures....I love it |
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