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Emotions
Contributed by
imalive_enoughsaid
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Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 05:11:56 PM in AEST
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Pour some salt inside a cut
thats how you made me feel
my heart just started to shrivle up
it all became so real
Take a needle to your mouth
and try to sew it up
for weeks i wouldent talk
your words just shut me up
pull a blade accross your wrist
and cringe at the blood you see
thats exactly how i cringed
at the thought of you and me
Throw a knife at someones heart
that you used to call your own
thats exactly how my heart felt
when those words came out the phone
put a rose inside some water
and watch it slowly wilt
thats exactly what im doing now
but yet , i love you STILL.
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Re: Emotions
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by pixie on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 05:13:00 PM AEST
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ouch, love really does hurt in this write, well expressed emotional poem,
takecare,
pixie xx |
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Re: Emotions
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by MickeyPigKnuckles on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 05:15:33 PM AEST
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| Very powerful and love is the most important part of life. Once again, another master piece from a very talented poet loaded with strong emotion. I can only hope that a little of you rubs off onto me as you are such an inspiration. Your Dear Friend MickeyPigKnuckles :o) |
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Re: Emotions
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by gherkin on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 05:19:58 PM AEST
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we've all been there and it hurts
- perfectly described with well chosen words
be brave
xx
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Re: Emotions
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by taryn on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 05:29:50 PM AEST
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| this is a beautiful write with good words. |
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Re: Emotions
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by theMoth on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 05:43:27 PM AEST
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Alot of hurt in this poem.
Good write.
--Mothy |
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Re: Emotions
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by Spike on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 05:12:00 AM AEST
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A powerful read. Loved the metaphors - confronting yet perfectly conveying the pain wrought by heartless words and acts. If this doesn't draw forth his empathy, nothing will!
Spike |
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Re: Emotions
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by DesperateSoul on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 06:56:32 PM AEST
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| Excellent JOb!!!!!!!!! Keep Posting,and writing always!!! ~*Dana~* |
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Re: Emotions
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by Errious on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 03:20:12 PM AEST
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wow! the repetition works excellently! I thought that was amazing! It not very often that you see a poem with that kind of imagery and feeling in it as that one. And the last stanza is a fantastic concluding verse and contasts the whole poem fantastically. Well done!
Tom
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Re: Emotions
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by NDean on
Thursday, 7th December 2006 @ 03:24:03 PM AEST
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A well written poem that flows excellently
Well done
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