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The Beautiful Day
Contributed by
philxcool
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Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 05:20:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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One day long ago, with sun bright and sky blue,
All I ever did was think about you.
Our souls danced in a field full of flowers
Tumbling and touching, for hours and hours.
The sky would darken and the sun would set
But this Day didn’t end when we laid down to rest.
When the morning rays shrouded the cosmos once more,
There were you and I, wrapped in each other on the floor.
Then that Day clouded with pride and with rain
And my heart came to fear for myself and my pain.
You were my queen, beautiful and fair
Stars danced in your eyes, the angels in your hair.
But our love became tainted by jealousy and fear
As everyone told us our hearts were too near.
But when all’s said and done, through all the strife
You’ll lovingly haunt dreams for the rest of my life.
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philxcool
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2004-11-03 17:20:05]
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Re: The Beautiful Day
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by pixie on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 05:44:34 AM AEST
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awww a very beautiful write, expressed well,
takecare,
pixie xx |
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Re: The Beautiful Day
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by Maruna on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 05:28:58 PM AEST
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Nicely written and expressed poem :) Might I suggest a slight alteration to the last couplet though? Dismiss it if you don't like it:
But when all is said and done, through all the strife,
You'll lovingly haunt my dreams, for the rest of my life.
I just think the rhythm works a little better :) |
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