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Lullaby
Contributed by
bohemian_with_a_pen
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Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 11:52:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Eternal bruises on a blackened heart
Wanting to end but unable to start
The rustling of souls as the devil sighs
Such a sweet but haunting lullaby
Nothing to lose, nothing to gain
Bodies gone numb, hearts filled with pain
The sorrowful mourn of an angels cry
Such a sweet but haunting lullaby
You’ve got the world in your palm now everything’s gone
Sitting in silence, absorbed by evil’s song
The unspoken words at a loved one’s final goodbye
Such a sweet but haunting lullaby
Lullaby…
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Re: Lullaby
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by mylastwords on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 12:13:20 AM AEST
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hey...i really like this write...i liked the rhythm...keep writing...
luv xxooxx mylastwords xxooxx |
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Re: Lullaby
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 02:05:49 AM AEST
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Great write powerfull and great flow.
Hugs,
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Re: Lullaby
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 03:22:14 AM AEST
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this is great to read out loud filled with emotion. Great work.
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Re: Lullaby
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 06:44:13 AM AEST
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deep and emotional write,
takecare
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Re: Lullaby
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 03:05:57 PM AEST
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yes a haunting lullaby indeed. I loved this I
was held from the first word to the last word.
The images placed in my head will take a
while to erase. Another lovely poem I think
you've got a new fan.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Lullaby
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by nataku on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 09:28:38 PM AEST
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| Thi is a really nice poem. I love that fact that a lullaby can indeed be all those things. |
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Re: Lullaby
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by anonymous_skies on
Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 06:00:19 AM AEST
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| That almost rolled off my tongue! I really felt the rhythm in your piece--and it made me remember why I enjoy rhyme and rhythm so much--all over again. Funny how my first poem uses the same word as your screen name, though I can't say I'm as good as you are. bobotheclown said what I felt: amazing, vivid, images, and haunting rhyme too. |
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Re: Lullaby
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 01:46:18 PM AEST
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This is an awesome write.....I loved it... Thank you for sharing it....
Jenni |
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Re: Lullaby
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by surge_joebot on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 06:29:23 PM AEST
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oh my gosh, that is really really really super good *jealous* lol
keep up the good work
cheers
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Re: Lullaby
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by Clementine on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 01:04:43 PM AEST
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your words are so beautiful...great write...and thank you for commenting on mine *hugs*
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Re: Lullaby
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 08:33:34 PM AEST
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I liked the line
"Wanting to end but unable to start" the best.
Nice write!
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Re: Lullaby
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 01:08:51 AM AEST
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haunting indeed, excellent poem:) hugs n' love nessa
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