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All In Your Eyes
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
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Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 09:25:26 PM in AEST
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I loved you and then I looked into your eyes
Devoured their secrets
Unleashed their strongest most delicate passions
I looked
I smiled
I opened my heart
Or perhaps you did that
I’m not sure
What I found is amazing
Breathtaking
Heart-stilling
It fuels my adrenaline still
First I found hope
Then truth
Then trust
Faith
Devotion
Love
Home- I found home
in your eyes as well as your arms
And then I saw it
Shimmering
Shining
Sparkling
Radiating
Basking in the glow
…Forever
I can see forever in your eyes
I can see forever sparkling, shimmering and I’m home and in love, devoted and faithful, trusting the truth with all the hope I can muster
Be still my heart, take my breath away, I’m wandering in amazement
You’ve opened my heart, made me smile, made me see, made me unleash a strong and fragile passion that was kept secret ‘ere I loved you enough to look into your eyes
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Re: All In Your Eyes
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by Doriens_Picture on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 09:35:11 PM AEST
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| wow a most beautiufl write and i would like to see the original |
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Re: All In Your Eyes
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 09:35:51 PM AEST
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| fantastic write. |
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Re: All In Your Eyes
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by n2dep2care on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 10:03:15 PM AEST
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Wonderfully beautiful, smooth flow. Very excellent!
Laurie |
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Re: All In Your Eyes
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 06:47:14 AM AEST
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wow suh a wonderful write,
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: All In Your Eyes
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by eatfresh22 on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 04:37:19 PM AEST
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Oh, Chelsea, why thank you! I didn't know my eyes held that much power over you! Hahahaha! Beautifully done. I love the parallel structure, the repetition, they rhythym, the structure of the stanzas. Each had an impacting effect on the overall beauty of the magnificent poem. Amazing, and the original would be quite enjoyable to read, I'm sure. (PM it to me). Yes, but not only that, I also thought it was an interesting, yet more true, less infatuated description of love (than society seems to hold today). Breath taking is the right word for this piece of art. It also shows a state of maturity. Lovely, Chelsea, lovely. Absolutely glorious.
~Carrie~ |
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Re: All In Your Eyes
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 07:17:29 PM AEST
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Very, very nice. Your poetry is growing in amazing ways.
Stitch |
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Re: All In Your Eyes
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 05:39:23 PM AEST
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Very beautiful poem. Very beautiful. Amazing. Well written and thought out.
Take care.
David |
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Re: All In Your Eyes
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by Stitch on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 06:03:50 AM AEST
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It's an incredible experience---like watching a flower open in fast forward. Tender hearts are so fragile. May yours be handled with care.
Stitch |
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