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Heartbeat
Contributed by
Aquaelius
on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 07:13:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
AnniversaryPoems
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I feel the blood pulsing,
sight darkens, fingers start to tingle.
Breath is eratic, air hard to come by.
I see her moving,
time bends around her, the world pauses.
Night sky is dark, she is the only star..
I sense her eyes scanning,
skin burns, balance, a fight to maintain.
Hands tremble, an earthquake in my soul.
I taste her hands touching,
skip a beat, then pound in my chest.
World melts away, sweet and tangy.
Only for her.
Copyright ©
Aquaelius
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2004-11-02 07:13:40]
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Re: Heartbeat
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 07:27:27 AM AEST
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aww it is so sad losing someone you love deeply, a sweet write, I am sorry you lost this love
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: Heartbeat
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by Red_October on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 08:16:20 AM AEST
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| This is a truth we have all felt at once, I'm sure, vulnerable and excitement with love. Nice write. Tiffany J. (Red_October) |
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Re: Heartbeat
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by little_genna on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 08:30:26 AM AEST
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This is sweet but very sad. I have them feelings myself about a 'friend' we're very close and act like we're a couple but i feel we are letting our chance slip out of our grasp.........great write by the way i really enjoyed reading it.
Take care
Gen xx |
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Re: Heartbeat
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by faffeee on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 10:13:48 AM AEST
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| perfect in a sad way, i so know this feeling. im so sorry. anniversairies are the worst, u just remember everything and can just imagine what youd be doing if you were still together...ive got one coming up soon too, so good luck :) xx |
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Re: Heartbeat
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by Rxqueen on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 05:39:11 AM AEST
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| God,I miss that feeling...You will find it again someday. I liked the way you used those words to convey your emotions. It is hard to put "that" feeling into text... but you succeeded quite well. |
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Re: Heartbeat
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 1st January 2005 @ 09:38:09 AM AEST
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Gorgeous...I'm sorry for your loss (we all are)
You did a fantastic job writing how you felt. I wish she would read this.... |
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Re: Heartbeat
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by Moon_Kitten05_07 on
Wednesday, 27th April 2005 @ 09:32:42 AM AEST
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hey this is really good i like it alot
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