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THE FEED
Contributed by
ladydp2000
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Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 07:02:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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(About "Louis",from Lestat, my vampire chronicles poems)
Silently the night again by me creeps in...
Evoking all these confusing feelings I need to conceal
Thoughts and dreams filled of doom, all of sudden begin
To change me into this hidious creature I cannot din
This thirst for new blood is in me now reveal
Silently the night by me creeps in...
I live on human blood and that's my curse, my sin
Lurking in the shadows to get my next meal
Thoughts and dreams filled of doom all of sudden begin
All my life dreams had just fade in...
Now I'd become this monster I come to repeal
Silently the night again by me creeps in...
Going for a kill every night again and again
Knowing things all the time I cannot reveal
Thoughts and dreams filled of doom of sudden begin...
I,Louis,doing what I have to, to survive in
My life had been sealed with things I have to conceal
Silently the night again by me creeps in...
Thoughts and dreams filled of doom all of sudden begin...
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ladydp2000
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Re: THE FEED
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 08:47:52 PM AEST (User
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fantastic write. great last stanza |
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Re: THE FEED
(User Rating: 1 ) by a_bear on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 12:21:03 AM AEST (User
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I'm not being critical here..but I've been working on one of these writes for weeks..and isn't the meter count off? I understood that it had to be in iambic pentameter to be a true VILLANELLE, as well as have the correct stanza count .. that's why they're so hard. Like Bob Dylans's...Do Not Go Gently Into The Night.. but if the count can be just anything..I'll post the ones I've got..I'd never make it in college if I took poetry..I'm tellin ya. I can't hear the count .. I have to see it..then try to imitate it until I've done one a zillion times... |
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Re: THE FEED
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kindredblood_dragon on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 08:24:19 AM AEST (User
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Always loved Vampyre writes, and i thought this one was beautifully written, awesome visual images, and with a graphic intensity that chills to the marrow, cool poem/story, a very enjoyible read. |
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