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Finally die
Contributed by
Swtpea92
on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 01:00:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Finally this is my last breath
i've been taken over by death
my soul is gone
i am no more
thats why i lay sprawled on the floor
as i think of dying
i can't stop crying
i always said it wouldnt go this far
just a couple cuts
here and there
I swear
feeling so alone
i start to moan
still more blood
that causes a flood
on the white floor
it won't stop, more and more
as i say godbye
i finally...die
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Swtpea92
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2004-10-31 13:00:46]
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Re: Finally die
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by pixie on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 01:27:29 PM AEST
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very sad write, i can relate well,
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: Finally die
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by Kevin on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 03:27:24 PM AEST
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That was really good, a little short but very very meaningful.
-Kevin |
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Re: Finally die
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 11:26:22 PM AEST
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| great write. |
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Re: Finally die
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by THORN on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 06:01:02 AM AEST
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NIIIIIIIIIIICE!
But remember - poetry isn't all about rhyme, it's about feelings, in any which way they come out!
But that's fantastic rhyming, I wish I could rhyme like that lol
Great for your 1st poem, loved it ;)
Cheers,
-XRaye
PS: are you alright? :S you got me a little worried; it was so powerfully emotional... |
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