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Dreams come true
Contributed by
LIving_In_My_Dream
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Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 04:41:29 PM in AEST
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If I could have my dreams come true
These are the things I'd like to do.
To have a cabin deep in the woods,
And someone to share both the bad and the good.
We'd lie by the fireplace,forever it seems,
And share with each other our future of dreams.
As we tire of talking,we'd snuggle up close,
These are the times, I'd cherish the most.
The times when I feel so close to someone,
Who gives me such pleasure and so much fun.
Who isn't afraid of what the future may bring,
And share so much love, that our hearts sing.
Sometimes I wonder will my dreams come true?
And I ask myself, could it be with you?
I don't have the answer, atleast not to share,
I'm afraid if I share them, you wouldn't care.
So, until the time comes, when the timing is right,
I'll cherish our time everyday and night.
And if in the future, our dreams become one,
Then I'll know that my dreams has only begun.
To have you beside me, through the rough seas and good,
I know we'd make magic, I'm sure that we could.
For you are my soul mate, I believe in my heart,
And to get to our dreams, we must first make a start.
So, please take my hand, and don't be afraid,
I believe that together, our cabin will be made.
I'll never doubt my feelings for you,
And if you return them, all our dreams can come true.
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Re: Dreams come true
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 04:47:32 PM AEST
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A very beautiful poem...nice job here
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Re: Dreams come true
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by a_bear on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 05:02:56 PM AEST
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"I'm afraid If I share them You wouldn't care~.."
that line really struck me.. wow. |
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Re: Dreams come true
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by mylastwords on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 08:55:39 PM AEST
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Another really beautiful write...i love the rhythm...it flows really well...keep writing...
xxooxx mylastwords xxooxx |
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Re: Dreams come true
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 06:55:41 AM AEST
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Awsome poem, writen nicely to perfection.
Hugs,
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Re: Dreams come true
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by light on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 12:18:35 AM AEST
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Outstanding poem Dani. I especially luv any poem about nature, luv and dreams. Sorry I only rate it a 4/5 although its definately worth a 5 howeva no poem is perfect. I only did it out of honor. Ya a great poet have ya considered contributing ya poems to www.poetry.com. Ya might be chosen as the poet of the year therefore win cash and be globally recognised as a great poet. I believe ya have a great chance of winning. I really believe in ya gift.
DREAMZ, PEACE, LIGHT & LUV ETERNALLY
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Re: Dreams come true
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 10:19:56 PM AEST
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Geesh, Dani - you're as hopeless as I am. LOL!
Honestly, I mean that as a compliment. Obviously, you are a dreamer, a romantic. This is a lovely expression of wishes, of hoping. I enjoyed this.
The line "To have you beside me, through the rough seas and good" struck me as slightly awkward. ending with simply "the bad and the good" there might help the flow a tad. I do hope you don't mind me suggesting as much.
Keep writing... I think many will enjoy your work
SNM
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Re: Dreams come true
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by Trippflip on
Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 05:22:15 PM AEST
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| sounds like some sort of greeting card... |
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