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Draw Me A Pretty Picture
Contributed by
cuddlytiger17
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Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 05:51:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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You beg for a new beginning;
A bottle of white-out
To erase the pain you’ve endured.
You long for a light bright enough
To dim the shadows that linger
At the corners of your eyes
Pulling your smile downwards,
Signifying your slow demise.
But your yawns become weaker
As weariness sets in
Yet you still cry out-
Reaching, reaching, reaching…
But not quite touching.
Seeking a savior,
To locate your lost soul
And a sense of being
A sense of importance
A sense of hope
Through these shaded days.
You’re asking for my help,
So I’ll do the best I can
I'm handing you a crayon,
Now color yourself out of your past
And draw me a pretty picture.
Copyright ©
cuddlytiger17
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2004-10-29 17:51:53]
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Re: Draw Me A Pretty Picture
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by Spazzo on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 06:20:05 PM AEST
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This is a great write. Jesus is the savior.
Spazzo |
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Re: Draw Me A Pretty Picture
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by emocutie07 on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 06:23:46 PM AEST
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ahmazing write! soo much emotion it yanked at my heart, and I really liked these lines-
Through these shaded days.
You’re asking for my help,
So I’ll do the best I can
I'm handing you a crayon,
Now color yourself out of your past
And draw me a pretty picture.
....beautiful wording....
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Re: Draw Me A Pretty Picture
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 07:32:07 PM AEST
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| very nice. =] |
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Re: Draw Me A Pretty Picture
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by ShadowDaughter on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 08:07:14 PM AEST
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*applauds enthusiastically* I love this!
This poem strikes just the right balance between beautiful wording and emotion . . . consider me impressed :). I don't want to use the word "touching", it'd sound sorta corny here (heh) but this really is. Really, that's the most we can do for anyone . . . and it's a lot, it truly is.
Wonderful job, and I really hope whoever this is for gets to see it :).
--Nora
Oh, PS: thanks so much for your blush-inducing comments! Seriously *continues blushing* lol . . . |
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Re: Draw Me A Pretty Picture
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 12:50:59 AM AEST
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wow, i love it!!!!
*draw me a pretty picture* |
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Re: Draw Me A Pretty Picture
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by theMoth on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 05:06:31 PM AEST
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Awesome poem.
A really good read,
and I loved the ending.
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