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Dark Clouds
Contributed by
Willofree
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Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 06:20:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
FamilyPoems
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Sun shone brightly until we arrived
We were in for an unpleasant surprise
All of a sudden things seemed forlorn
Dark clouds began to form
Loud voices in anger raised to one another
A door slams and she races for cover
Four little girls come crying
Hard to tell if someone was dying
One grand-daughter separated from the others
Her mother wanted to leave with just one another
Brothers caught in the conflict together
Their wives would not reconcile what so ever.
Atmosphere was tense indeed
To the voice of reason there was no heed
Parties responsible would not involve
So there was nothing we could resolve
The mood became tense and sad
I know what a bad feeling I had
Children got involved in play and forgetting
Except for the mother and daughter who left quitting
So what happens next is the question
I'm sure there will be suggestions
I just know that pride and ego must go
So the family can again thrive and grow
It continues to be an awkward situation
Any togetherness is met with trepidation
It is a struggle whenever we are all together
Hope we can learn to get along better
God Only Knows...
Copyright ©
Willofree
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2004-10-28 18:20:02]
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Re: Dark Clouds
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by Sirena_Degana on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 06:59:41 PM AEST
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this is so sad...i know some of the emotions put in this one...
good write
blessed be
sirena |
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Re: Dark Clouds
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by a_bear on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 09:27:43 PM AEST
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| Well, the poem was great..what do you want suggestions on. I've lived together with 3 families..so I know what family fights are..what tension is..my sis and her family..my husbands mom, his brother , wife and their 2 kids..my daughter-in-law and 2 grand-kids. At time none of us could see eye to eye.. we learned to stay away from each other as best we could.. My daughter-in-law would leave and just take one of my grand kids..abandon the other one..doesn't sound like I could give suggestions, huh? LOL |
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Re: Dark Clouds
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by emystar on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 07:18:46 PM AEST
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sounds like my son and oldest dAUGHTER RIGHT NOW.
I've always asked one thing on holidays and that's my children but this year it hasn't been that way.
Very good write and it's gotta be painfull to experience something like this.
huggs,
emy |
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