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The girl in the attic
Contributed by
Nixzy
on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 05:17:45 PM in AEST
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In the attic all alone, sat a girl upon a thrown,
Covered in dust, webs and mould,
She could have only been 5years old,
Her eyes bled with sorrow and also with fear,
Every second fell another depressed tear.
Her jet black hair shone in the moons light,
Making her tears sparkle night after night.
She is deadly confused and full of mistakes,
Abandoned and alone the kind everyone hates,
Her name is Jessy along with her doll Mary,
With pins in its eyes which makes it scary,
Her hair is dyed black and her lips are pure red,
With inscriptions on her body, about being dead.
Poor little Jessy alone and so cold,
With her doll in her arms for her to hold.
Copyright ©
Nixzy
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2004-10-28 17:17:45]
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Re: The girl in the attic
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by Live2Die on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 05:25:42 PM AEST
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| wooahh this is so...touching. I can feel pour Jessies pain, and it paints a perfect picture in my mind.awesme write Nixzy |
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Re: The girl in the attic
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by Elf on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 06:34:18 PM AEST
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I really like this one. Love the detail.
-*Meric*- |
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Re: The girl in the attic
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by Rxqueen on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 08:19:41 AM AEST
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| I have to agree with Elf the detail was great. Wonderful imagery! |
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Re: The girl in the attic
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by Dawny on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 09:09:14 AM AEST
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Great imagery and flow, this is fantastic!! You have such a talent for the darker side.
Love Dawny x |
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Re: The girl in the attic
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by DeathByLove on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 05:17:48 PM AEST
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| I love how you write saying things so clearly talking about how the life of jessy is a terrible death |
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