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Cold
Contributed by
pixie
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Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 04:04:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
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We are both feeling very cold,
Now that our heartache has been sold,
I was plagued with pain years ago,
It has poisoned me over time very slow.
The frost has settled inside our souls,
On our love it is really taking its toll,
There is now a wedge in between us,
We used to be able to just get over the fuss.
Over the months things have become strained,
Both our feeling have become drained,
I haven’t slept well in so many weeks,
I have now lost my wanting to eat.
I am sat here thinking & worrying about you,
I don’t have the answers; I don’t know what to do,
I want to be strong again but I don’t know how,
No wonder you hate me I have been such a cow.
We are warm when we are together,
In our lives has crept the cold weather,
I’m scared & feel like I have really lost my way
I would do anything so our heartache doesn’t stay.
I want to thaw out your frozen heart,
I think that we both need a brand new start,
Spend some precious time alone with each other,
Laying so close & loving like lovers.
Copyright ©
pixie
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2004-10-28 16:04:43]
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Re: Cold
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by theMoth on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 04:33:15 PM AEST
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Awesome use of the
hot and cold themes.
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Re: Cold
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by secretwind on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 05:00:46 AM AEST
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I can feel the emotional torture In this flow...
Take care dear pixie,hope things work out for you.
The Wind.... |
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Re: Cold
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by pander on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 06:01:21 AM AEST
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This write really does set up that feeling of abandonment and lonliness in the reader's mind.
So emotional and so disturbing.
To be able to paint such a vivid mental picture in the minds of the readers is a rare talent Pixie. This, like so much of your work, is so obviously heart-felt. I hope things get better for you very soon.
Luv,
Pander
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Re: Cold
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by Dawny on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 09:10:55 AM AEST
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I hope time is a healer for you my friend. This is beautifully emotional and expressive, I love the theme and the flow.
Excellent write
Love Dawny x |
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Re: Cold
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 01:01:02 PM AEST
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Like mothy I also love the hot/cold idea.
This is so sad hunni, it's a stunner though.
I hope that everything warms up for you soon.
*huggies* Phil xxx |
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