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I Used To Have Nightmares I
Contributed by
thumper
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Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 09:38:03 AM in AEST
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I used to have nightmares
Nightmares of him beating me
Beating me with a belt and screaming
Screaming hate at me and hitting me all over
Hitting me all over and all the welts
All the welts and bruises on my chest
On my chest and shoulders and back
Back and legs and God I wished
I wished him dead and wished it over.
I used to have nightmares
Nightmares of him electrocuting me
Electrocuting me and watching out the window
Watching out the window and smiling
Smiling while the juice danced in my veins
Danced in my veins and I wondered
I wondered if I was going to make it
Make it this time and survive
Survive to live another day.
I used to have nightmares
Nightmares when I was young
Young and nowhere to turn
Nowhere to turn and nowhere to go
Nowhere to go for help
Help, there was none for me
None for me and no one to see
See that he was taking it out on me
Taking it out on me that Mom was Adulterous.
I used to have nightmares
Nightmares that he would succeed
Succeed in killing me like he told me he would
He would kill me for my insurance
For my insurance he took it out on me
Took it out on me so he could collect
Could collect he told me is why
Is why he adopted me for the rights
For the rights to abuse and kill me.
I used to have nightmares
Nightmares every night for years
For years I woke to streaming tears
Streaming tears upon my pillows
Upon my pillows I lived in Hell
In Hell every night for many a year
For many a year and many a tear
Many a tear to understand why
Understand why he was so pathetic!
I used to have nightmares.
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by pixie on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 09:44:10 AM AEST
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wow, powerful and moving write, I am sorry for what you had to go through, but getting it out of your system is the best thing you could do, you have been brave by sharing this *hugs*
takecare
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 11:50:38 AM AEST
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You have been very strong to come through this, makes for some great poetry though.
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by a_bear on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 02:35:58 PM AEST
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| I like the style of repetition..that's great. You did live in hell. I had a friend, my best friend in school that came to school with welts all over her body..her mom just let it go on..I know now about the terrible fear that paralizes a person.. great write, |
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 02:29:54 AM AEST
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| Powerful and emotion-packed write, I'm glad that you've exorcised your past demons, so to speak. I love the repetition format, especially when used in the very last line "I used to have nightmares" - to me the last line encompasses the whole essence of the poem and the fact that you are moving on and are strong. Kudos, I thought this was an excellent write. |
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 04:24:41 AM AEST
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| Awww..my dearest friend...hmmm hugs and love..this is very powerful write..:-) venkat |
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 01:49:05 AM AEST
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Wow Thumper !!! The write is incredible.
The subject matter heart wrenching.
I hope by used to ... the nightmares have ceased.
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by bernard on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 12:40:22 PM AEST
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| What makes a man or woman do such things. My lovely wife and I have a tiff now and again but thank God we are not of the violent kind. I had a lot to put up with in the Orphanage when I was a very young child. I still ask myself why some people must use violence on the ones they profess to love be it wife child or yes even some men suffer from violent wives. Great write you have all my sympathy Love from bern. |
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by inoc on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 03:23:34 PM AEST
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BRILLIANTLY written thumper....
you deserve comments as wow what an exhausting nightmare...hope the poision is now away from you bernard leaving you to have a peaceful nights rest...as you sure deserve
cheers!
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 03:23:07 AM AEST
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If you were'nt crying when you wrote this
the write definitely shed tears for you
The pain you went through he will get back
time's ten in death |
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by xXcrossedXx on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 12:43:49 PM AEST
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Aww Thumper! *hugs* :'(
This was a very very emotional and moving write, I loved every line and the rhyme scheme fit wonderfully with the poem. It had a wonderful flow and was tragically beautiful.
Keep up the wonderful writes,
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by Doubtless_One on
Tuesday, 23rd August 2005 @ 09:41:10 PM AEST
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this poem makes me upset
upset to know that anyone could hurt someone who i respect soo much
i hope you have found your inner peace |
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by Archie on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 09:43:15 AM AEST
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| I am definately moved by this poem. I still carry emotional baggage from my mom. One day after I made a mistake she beat me until I threw up and kept beating me. If my dad had not come home she would have killed me. When I got older and finally moved away I would block out all the incidents that happened between me and her eventually growing a friendship with her and taking care of her before she died. Your story is much different than mine, but I wanted you to know that you are not alone. |
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Re: I Used To Have Nightmares I
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by Sinfullilmissmuppet on
Monday, 24th October 2005 @ 12:44:09 AM AEST
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Hey,
Thanx for commenting on my poem!!
I dunno if this applies here or not but the sole prupose of my poetry is that im consumed by one or more memories or emotions and the words just sorta spill over with or without my control.
You seemed in control of what you were saying and i'm sorry u had to go thru such bad times even if it dus make a thought provoking poem.
I say this alot but i'd rather be illeterate(im pretty sure i spelt that wrong) then have great poetry from crap experiences , they may make you stronger but they hurt like hell!
anyways theres my two bobs worth feel free to tell me what you think of ne of my poetry
till next time
emz
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