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People around
Contributed by
PhantomVampyress
on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 09:26:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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So many things
swirling and whirling around
in deformed shapes
alluring illusions
destined to fade
surfacing above , falling inward
dying outward
screams silently
voids being filled
passions eroding
faces coroding
death at hand
bountiful land
broken bones
bruised souls
mending hearts
dreams of the night
sorrows in the day
falseness is spread
the beginning of all ends
JENNA
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PhantomVampyress
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2004-10-27 21:26:41] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: People around
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 10:00:13 PM AEST (User
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amazing write. very well written. i like the powerful tone in this. |
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Re: People around
(User Rating: 1 ) by travisk on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 11:42:20 PM AEST (User
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feelin the language and style
good rythmic syntax |
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Re: People around
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 03:32:31 AM AEST (User
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Powerfull, deep, wise write.
Great writing.
It's a masterpeice even tho sad.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: People around
(User Rating: 1 ) by dreampillar on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 04:02:28 PM AEST (User
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Wow, Sonbuggy... this is definately one of my favorites and you know I've read and listened to about a MILLION of your poems... lol! This is a very moving and textured piece.
I especially like the "falling inward/ dying outward" part, it appeals to me.
*dreampiller |
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Re: People around
(User Rating: 1 ) by UnlovedChild on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 12:06:19 AM AEST (User
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Once again great write. Keep it up! |
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