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synergy
Contributed by
cant-skate
on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 10:38:26 AM in AEST
Topic:
sarcasticpoetry
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And i see the pain in your eyes...
let it be!
and i see the rain in the sky
let it be!
and i see the tears on your cheecks
and i see that u can see
let it be!
hundred years of lies you stood like if u ll be forever here
took my brain for a bean
planted oaks in my eyes
played fool with my heart
smoked pot of my nose
drank wine of my blood
been my parazite !
And now that my days are here ! i ll just watch u frie
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2004-10-26 10:38:26] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: synergy
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 10:17:31 PM AEST (User
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Well.. First of all it would be more effective if you spelled out "you." Watch your spelling. Other than that, it's not bad and effectively conveys your anger at the end. |
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