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this girl i thought i knew so well
Contributed by
TornApart
on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 05:15:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Tries to hide her pain,
Thinks her life is meaningless..
And theres nothing more to gain.
She knows that she is loved..
But these people dont understand,
How she cries.....
And wants to die!....
She hides all her anger and all her pain,
With a simple smile..
So no-one knows the real her,
She does it with so much style
When shes alone..
And can only hear the echo of her cry.....
this is where it ends.......
this is where she dies......
She gets a knife,pierces it deep into her wrist.
Blood pours out
As she cries..and clenches her fist
She falls to the floor motionless
Shes now not in pain..
No-one can do her wrong
ever again..
There was a note beside her bed...
She wrote it before she slit her wrists.....
Before she fled.
And this tearful note her mother read.
Dont cry for me
This was meant to be.....
I couldnt take any more.......
So i chose to walk into deaths doors,
I loved you.And i always will.
Even tho im gone,ill come back and visit still
Just cos you wont be able to see me
Does not mean im not there.....
Give my love to all who cared
And tell them im safe....im with my dad :o)
And i hope all the people who made me do this will be glad!!!
So this is a girl i thought i knew so well....
who slit her wrists just to be free...
and this girl was.. ME!
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TornApart
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2004-10-26 05:15:54]
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 07:25:10 AM AEST
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Heh, that seems familiar. Its a great poem and thank you for sharing.
Take Care
- Becca |
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 09:13:21 AM AEST
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Well, that was certainly a twist on the ending. Interesting write.
Stitch |
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by screwup on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 01:55:25 PM AEST
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what a heartbreaking poem... I am so sorry you feel this way, pm me if you need to, I understand what you are going thru, you are NOT alone...
~screwup |
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by Nezenic on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 07:24:33 PM AEST
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| this poem is written very well, and it is such a poignant share. |
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 07:57:00 PM AEST
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| I LOVED your poem. it was like a pulse, pushing me foward into reading it. I really liked the suicide note. I think has a little bit of this girl inside them... I did. This poem really brought stuff up for me, but that's a good thing! ;-) Great work! 5*'s! |
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by surge_joebot on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 07:16:53 PM AEST
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| that quite possibly was the most intence thing i have ever read... and you say it's your first poem... *bows to you* and such a good job you did |
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by Crash on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 07:57:41 AM AEST
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| This poem really expresses the depth of suicide, and it is a damn good poem! |
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by Swtpea92 on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 01:10:23 PM AEST
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| that was really amazing for ur first poem! omg |
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by Swtpea92 on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 01:10:49 PM AEST
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| that was really amazing for ur first poem! omg |
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by Swtpea92 on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 01:11:07 PM AEST
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| that was really amazing for ur first poem! omg |
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Re: this girl i thought i knew so well
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by THORN on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 06:03:19 AM AEST
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!!
But are you alright?
It's funny you know, how most poetry, is about suicide, hate, etc.
It seems to me the majority of poets like poetry 'coz it's the only way they can express their true feelings, without the "real world" knowing...
Again, fantastic, keep it up and take care.. screw the world ;)
Cheers,
-XRaye |
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