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Over you
Contributed by
searchingforlove
on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 08:09:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I pick my pen once again
Trying to push u away from my thoughts
Desperately trying to think about something else
Desperately trying the not to find your smiling face in the clouds
Trying to forget those few incalculable moments we sat in my backyard talking
Don’t u understand every moment is like an eternity when I am not with you
Don’t u understand the desperation
How can u not u were once there
It seems like perpetuity since I have written about something but u
About those warm blue eyes that glimmer when u smile
That smile that can soften a heart of stone
That touch that sends chills down my back
Just your thought makes even my tears taste sweet
You say we’ll always be friends nothing will ever change
Don’t u think I’ve noticed how far away u seem when your with her
Don’t u think I noticed how far-flung those times seem when we sat down and laughed
You say I am crazy u say its just a crush
You say I’ll be over u
But my question is will I ever be over u
That only time will answer until then my paper will always have tear marks.
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Re: Over you
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 08:19:06 PM AEST
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| I like this one. I agee, the last line could be stand to be altered maybe, but over all, I really enjoyed this. |
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Re: Over you
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by Stonedraider23 on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 08:35:41 PM AEST
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| good one wish i knew what to say like the other person the last line outta be changed but its a good one |
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Re: Over you
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by Jerr-Bear on
Wednesday, 8th April 2009 @ 11:02:07 AM AEST
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I think that it is really good.
Don't get me wrong, you're formats and the repetitiveness could be avoided, but other than that I think you did a really good job.
(:
[J]err-[B]ear.qoes.RAWR |
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