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Look what love has done to me
Contributed by
caughtinadream
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Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 07:57:22 PM in AEST
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Look what love has done to me
I am as broken as I can be.
My heart is running from my mind
Happiness- a feeling I wish I could find.
I don't see the beauty in the pain
I'm left with nothing to gain.
I've tried to pretend, I've tried not to care
But it hasnt gotten me anywhere.
I'm going to leave, to run far away
Maybe I can find some place to stay.
A new heart is what I need
For myself, I am doing this out of greed.
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caughtinadream
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2004-10-24 19:57:22]
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Re: Look what love has done to me
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by kidpoet_213 on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 08:17:41 PM AEST
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I think it flows very well... u did a good job of doing the rhyming evey two lines... technically it all there...
Content... it's all there too!! Good job... never doubt urself... just write what's in ur heart and let it go at that... if ppl like that's fine... if they don't that's fine too!!! U know what u mean whether they get it or not!!
Again... Great job... hope to read more from u...
~Donna~ |
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Re: Look what love has done to me
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 08:21:21 PM AEST
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| excellent write. i think this flows and rhymes very well also. very nicely presented. |
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Re: Look what love has done to me
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by Stellar on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 07:58:40 PM AEST
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Really hits home... there's nothing quite like love. it's the best and the worst thing that can happen to you sometimes. thanks for the comment, and this is a great poem too.
Take care : ) |
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