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The Old Ball Game
Contributed by
subgenius
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Wednesday, 20th October 2004 @ 01:07:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Take me out to the ball game
Or anywhere I don't have to hear your voice
I took you out of the crowd
Because I thought you were special
I bought you peanuts and cracker jacks
And everything else that made you smile
Now I don't care if you ever come back
No home run could make up for your mistakes
It's root, root, root, for forgiveness
You threw too many wild pitches
You lost me, it's a shame
Now I'm headed home
Cause it's ONE! TWO! THREE! strikes you're out
When you play me like a ball game
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subgenius
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2004-10-20 13:07:30]
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Re: The Old Ball Game
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 20th October 2004 @ 03:26:08 PM AEST
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NIce adaptation...
Jenni |
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Re: The Old Ball Game
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 20th October 2004 @ 04:50:50 PM AEST
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Home run, Sub!
Allegorical to the hilt. 5 stars because I haven't rated anyone in a while, and I couldn't find anything to critique about this, apart from the fact that not everyone gets baseball (i'm americanized) and mightn't understand it . . .
But anyway, keep writing. I enjoy it when you do. |
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Re: The Old Ball Game
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by blueyes11 on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 09:43:23 PM AEST
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| I like that. It's an unusual twist to an old classic. I think you have some talent there! I'll have to read more of your stuff! |
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Re: The Old Ball Game
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by doodley_5 on
Friday, 14th January 2005 @ 08:44:56 PM AEST
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| i love the whole song/poem thing.. i give it 2 thumbs up |
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