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If we were meant to be
Contributed by
Live2Die
on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 09:51:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I thought we were meant to be,
Before he said,
"I hate you."
Those simple words
Smashed my perfect life
Into a thousand smithereens.
I looked around,
Searching for something.
Anything,
To hold onto.
But everything was gone.
Smashed
By those simple words.
"I hate you."
If only he knew,
What he had done.
Maybe he would care,
Maybe he would look back,
Maybe he would see me.
Maybe he would hear me.
Calling for him.
Screaming for his voice.
Maybe he would care.
Maybe he would turn.
Call out my name.
Come back to me.
But that is a dream.
A fantasy.
I hope this is a nightmare,
That I will awake from.
But then I look around.
And see the reality.
Hit me,
Like a tornado.
If only he knew,
How he had hurt me.
Maybe he would turn.
And apologize.
Maybe he would see me.
Think back,
Come back.
But is that what I want?
I answer myself.
No.
I want to be me.
Without him.
Copyright ©
Live2Die
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2004-10-19 21:51:26]
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Re: If we were meant to be
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by alliecat on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 10:02:05 PM AEST
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| i love your way with words....they show how and what you feel....i can totally relate....great poem |
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Re: If we were meant to be
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by 2ndChance on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 11:24:45 PM AEST
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| I just read this poem w/o realizing you had written it...great work! I especially love the last two lines, strong ending. You wrote the truth. Good job! |
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Re: If we were meant to be
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by a_bear on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 12:10:08 PM AEST
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| I like the ending..it gives the whole poem a second wind kind of thing. great. I don't know if it's contest material..I guess that depends on what the contest is looking for? I want to be me; without him. great line. |
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Re: If we were meant to be
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by venkat on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 11:49:15 PM AEST
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| heart touching..at the same time very strong..well wrapped. :-) venkat |
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Re: If we were meant to be
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 04:14:21 AM AEST
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| Loved reading this, there's much empowerment at the end even though you're hurting. Be strong! :) |
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Re: If we were meant to be
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by Live2Die on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 09:11:58 AM AEST
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| Just thought I'd say thanx for al the great comments! And the pain in this poem is not mine. The only pain I got from this event was from watching as my Friend, who I consider a Sister, getting hurt. I felt like tehre was nothing I could do. But, we have overcome it. This was just written one night...on a...spark...I was just sitting at my computer and all of a sudden I open up word and start typing. But the pain in this was not mine, but anothers. |
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Re: If we were meant to be
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by Nixzy on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 05:28:42 PM AEST
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| Thanx for ur comment on my poem :) Im glad some one likes my poems. Your poem is amazing and i really liked it.I actually felt the emotion inside. x |
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