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Always, All Days, My Love
Contributed by
Deleterious_Dislike
on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 03:04:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I hate to think
one day
I may
never see your eyes
relinquishing what has never been
stop torturing my skies
exuding, posthaste
theyre diminishing in size
I hate to imagine
your name
marked upon
your grave
a fervent speech would be voiced
after deep thoughts in conclave
thank you pressure,upon my trigger
this life has now been waived
I pray I'll always kiss
your soft
warm
living lips
with the breath i take, as you touch
that one last time
it'll total my eclipse
and the love'll weep from our finger tips
i hope that you
Will not
die before I do
Everyday must be a new
and you should see the seconds through
as I do
with you
side by side
alive
breathing
together
no leaving
not ever
our wrists bound
forever
and always..
all days
my love..
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Deleterious_Dislike
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Re: Always, All Days, My Love
(User Rating: 1 ) by PumpkinPie on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 04:23:09 PM AEST (User
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You may find your write weird, but I loved every verse ! It's very unique which makes it beautifully special-
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Re: Always, All Days, My Love
(User Rating: 1 ) by theMoth on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 04:43:18 PM AEST (User
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Very interesting
read.
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Re: Always, All Days, My Love
(User Rating: 1 ) by Se1f-Destruct on
Friday, 22nd October 2004 @ 11:48:48 PM AEST (User
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Thats how i feel about my animals... My pitbull just died, thats how i felt when i was with him and it kills me to know that he's not breathing anymore. I really like the way you write.... |
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Re: Always, All Days, My Love
(User Rating: 1 ) by Scarlett on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 03:38:31 AM AEST (User
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interesting write, very enjoyable to read.
especially liked
"side by side
alive
breathing
together
no leaving
not ever
our wrists bound
forever"
touching! x |
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Re: Always, All Days, My Love
(User Rating: 1 ) by forever_lonely on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 06:39:02 PM AEST (User
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I dont know why but when i read this i get a cold feeling, a feeling of loss, the content doesnt suggest that in the slightest but its how i feel whe i read this poem
An excellent piece some top lines that i would pay good money to read or hear
i like the rhyme scheme and i like the rhythm, you have the technical side of the poem down to an art, and the rest is flawless, most impressive
Hung, Drawn and Quartered
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Re: Always, All Days, My Love
(User Rating: 1 ) by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 03:38:03 AM AEST (User
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awesome |
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