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I Hate you, forever and always.
Contributed by
Chanti
on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 09:42:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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You held my hand
and i held yours
now i scream for freedom
and a cure
for this disease
of needing you
this scorching pain
of being used
and i hated you then
and i hate you now
your promises
deceitful vows
you would hold me close
until i choked
until my blood ran cold
you left me here
with nothing
and to think i gave you
everything
i hate you.
I've always hated you.
Copyright ©
Chanti
... [
2004-10-17 21:42:05]
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Re: I Hate you, forever and always.
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 10:06:47 PM AEST
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now i scream for freedom
and a cure
for this disease
of needing you
I like this, Chanti. There is an abundance of "I hate you" poems - but there is creativity in this one... most particularly in the lines above. Honestly, I think I'd prefer a different title on this piece... something that would set it apart (perhaps, simply "My Disease"... dunno).
Well done! I hope you don't mind my rambling comments, with my two cents thrown in. Keep writing!
SNM |
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Re: I Hate you, forever and always.
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 10:16:24 PM AEST
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| i loved this. brilliant write. this has power, emotion, and is written with excellence. |
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Re: I Hate you, forever and always.
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by clotti on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 11:16:36 AM AEST
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| i like this is shows pain and emotion in a ery differnet sytle to what else i have read, i think that you should keep writing for i like reading it! the pain you show here is hard to imagine i only hope in time it will get better |
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Re: I Hate you, forever and always.
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by sicknivesevered on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 01:05:04 PM AEST
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| Flowing from the screen through my eyes, out of my mouth and into a scream - I feel the blisters in this - Very ***** good write. |
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