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indicazione (rho)...
Contributed by
metro
on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 10:18:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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a road ahead
and no green lights to guide me,
walking (again) toward
what looks like
blue bodies of water -
the illusions of skin,
the mirages of you
instigated by heat wave...
i see greece -
only gravel ahead...
a desolate consequence,
to let my rebirth get the best of me,
as if i could ever believe in being loved...
i want to climb into yer window, steal you away...
i want to call you from a payhone
and dare you to find me...
smoke me like a cigarette...
play me like a string...
i want to erase it all - what lies between us,
but i write w/ ink and deconstruction's
not that simple...
a pen... a hand... revelations, a road...
no green lights to guide me,
walking (again)...
Copyright ©
metro
... [
2004-10-16 22:18:54] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: indicazione (rho)...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rxqueen on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 11:56:32 PM AEST (User
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I loved this, it was so deep! Really cool. I especially liked this stanza:
i want to climb into yer window, steal you away...
i want to call you from a payhone
and dare you to find me...
smoke me like a cigarette...
play me like a string...
That was hot!!! Good job!
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Re: indicazione (rho)...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 08:28:49 AM AEST (User
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I loved it... could use a little bit of editing
but overall a very good write. Love the title as well.
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Re: indicazione (rho)...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 09:37:31 PM AEST (User
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i liked this very much. |
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