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16 years old..
Contributed by
xemptydecemberx
on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 08:31:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Bleeding now, she falls to the floor
Desperate for change, feeling no more
She's cut away her emotions again
Relying on this knife, her only friend
As peices of her lay shattered on the ground
Where the blood from her arms will soon be found
When they find her body motionless and cold
Shes gone forever, at only 16 years old..
Wrapping her body up neatly in a sheet
Tieing the nametag tightly on her feet
Her parent's clear her room out..
Looking through her stuff without a doubt.
They find a black notebook, hidden deep away
Filled with heart-felt poems of how she never wanted to stay
Of how her father used to beat her, how her mother never cared
How she felt this pain and sorrow was never really shared
Monday comes around, everyone is in class
Her friends wondering where she is as they stare out the glass
Outside to the world where everything is never okay,
Where they find out that they lost a good friend that day
They lost her to her suicide, to blood spills on the floor
Theres no more passing notes, no....not anymore.
Guilt now is all they have, and memories of her
Now the world just seems such a giant blur.
They blame themselves, they werent ever there
They couldnt prove to her before..
How much they really cared.
Copyright ©
xemptydecemberx
... [
2004-10-16 20:31:37]
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Re: 16 years old..
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 08:52:45 PM AEST
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| Very emotional touching poem. I hope that everyone can get through this and that she's in a better place. |
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Re: 16 years old..
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 09:56:14 PM AEST
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| emotional and powerful write. written with excellence. presented perfectly. |
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Re: 16 years old..
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 01:23:56 AM AEST
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| a really wonderful poem. greatly written. im sry your friend had to feel such pain. peace n love. God bless. jenny |
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Re: 16 years old..
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 03:57:32 AM AEST
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| touching |
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Re: 16 years old..
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by screwup on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 01:39:06 PM AEST
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Jacque,
you did a great job... and you know what, it sounds just like me... I don't know if that what you were trying to get at but oh well...lol
but fantastic work...
Deanna |
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Re: 16 years old..
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by Broken_Skin on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 10:43:08 AM AEST
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This was very upsetting, it was good
4 out of 5 |
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Re: 16 years old..
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by Crash on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 06:12:28 PM AEST
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| Reading this poem, I can feel it strongly, this is a great write! |
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Re: 16 years old..
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by Mandy2007 on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 03:15:44 PM AEST
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This sounds just like me. My parents fight, and i feel like i need to go. My friends say they will miss me, but will they? really? If they will miss me, they'd do something to stop me, they'd be there for me when i need them.
Keep writing and read my poems if you want |
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Re: 16 years old..
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by xforever_faking_a_smile3x on
Monday, 6th November 2006 @ 08:13:23 PM AEST
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| such a great write...so emotional i loved it |
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