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Giving Up...
Contributed by
pyrofungus
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Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 11:01:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Giving up on people
Caring about anything has gone to shame
Myself, who am I now?
Who shall I become?
I’ve given up
I will no longer watch and learn
I want nothing
Just the happiness that will never swim my way
I will continue to grow weaker
Watching myself sink lower and lower
In my pool of misery
I shall stand on the bottom
Below the surface
No one will see me
I’m far to deep
In my pool of misery
Yet one day I will start to rise
To float up again
Just to sink once more…
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Re: Giving Up...
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by Kitty_cat on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 12:02:52 PM AEST
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A very depressing poem with a lot of truth in it. Well done for writing this poem...it made me realise that I should appreciate what I have now because soon things will start to get worse, and at least when all this bad stuff happens, I can take satisfaction in knowin I was grateful for what I had and used my time well. Sorry for going on
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Re: Giving Up...
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by afterdark on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 12:05:10 PM AEST
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| This was well wrote..I liked it very ,much |
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Re: Giving Up...
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by sandy_poetrygodslove on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 12:21:33 PM AEST
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| You can take what has happened to you to make you feel this way and let it eat you up. or you can say that it wont let you down and make yourself stronger and defeat this.. you have a talent of writing your feelings down so keep it going. One moment in life that we live out out discuss because of what happened to us is a time we waisted instead of smiling and singing it away. try it. |
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Re: Giving Up...
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by MysticFireFairy on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 04:22:27 PM AEST
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I love the way you write your poems because you know to set the image that makes people feel like they are there...Great Poem
Keep it up
Love Kayla |
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Re: Giving Up...
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by apcfan on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 06:22:56 PM AEST
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This is sad... but very true... we all feel like this at times... more than others...
Good write.
Brandi |
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Re: Giving Up...
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by Jeff_Scott_Morehead on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 09:55:25 PM AEST
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Fine write!
The ending was very sad, but I hope there is light at the end of the tunnel.
Jeff |
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Re: Giving Up...
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by Cynthia on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 10:53:38 PM AEST
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| This is such a sad write, but all too true. I can feel your feelings in this write. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Giving Up...
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by saha on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 10:40:20 AM AEST
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| hey bro! This is sooo true. Happines.... this is that we all want. We realize that we had it when we've losted it. I spent lots of my time trying to escape to the times when I was a child and everything seems to be so much fun. But unfortunelly I can't find a way to do that. When you start to distinguish what's real and what is only a dream, life becoming so much harder. From the day when I realized that, I'm slowly fading day by day. Great job. |
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Re: Giving Up...
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by BabyFacedAngel2010 on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 01:18:50 PM AEST
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I love your writes there really great BUT... some of them leave the reader in a hang but other than that they are really great work on ending alittle more...
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Re: Giving Up...
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by Sinned on
Sunday, 26th December 2004 @ 03:47:25 AM AEST
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We all have them days
Everything good has gone away
Then we come back
As a matter of fact
Life is good again
We cast away our pain
People with all their falts
Something is there we are taught
In self pitty we no longer burn
Lesson learned
Together
We are here to help each other
Come up and stay
Someone needs you today
I liked your poem
At times we do feel alone
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