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My Dark Cold Tower
Contributed by
AliB
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Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 01:26:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Look into my liquid eyes
See sorrows reflection staring back
Mirroring my emotions, hear my sighs
My hard exterior is ready to crack
Hiding away in my dark, cold tower
Alone and afraid, not knowing which way to turn
Fighting so hard not to relinquish my power
Trying to stay strong, unable to learn
Unseen forces tearing apart my soul
Doing me wrong, breaking me down
Always there to witness my fall
My face a scowl, my brow a frown
A restlessness creeping over me
Allowing my persona to dwindle away
Changes are needed immediately
If in this body I wish to stay
Hope for the future and love in the air
Are things that will convince me to remain
My heart on my sleeve, my soul laid bare
For all to see, my distress, my disdain
When the sun does awaken, I gaze at the new dawn
Feeling refreshed with vigour and zest
To stay or to leave? I'm not really torn
I'll fight my demons and then I can rest
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AliB
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Re: My Dark Cold Tower
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by pixie on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 01:35:22 PM AEST
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good luck with fighting your demons, your poem shows strength akthough you may feel weak and emotional, a very good display of feelings here,
pixie xx |
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Re: My Dark Cold Tower
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 09:38:58 PM AEST
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"Look into my liquid eyes
See sorrows reflection staring back"
GREAT opening lines...
This poem left me speechless. Wonderful write.
~Breezy
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Re: My Dark Cold Tower
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 01:53:20 PM AEST
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now this is poetry! good write Ali!
(hey do you know how many people i've had to pm and explain what a gammon tree is!!!)
5 stars well written work.
Johnny. |
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Re: My Dark Cold Tower
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by Dawny on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 04:59:06 AM AEST
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Hi Ali
Wow, this is a chilling exploration of your emotions. Well written and very creative, love the flow and pace, the opening two lines are awesome!!
This was a breathtaking read, one of my favourites of yours
Love Dawny
Ps Whats a gammon tree????? |
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