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Suspended in this moment
Contributed by
Juliet
on
Thursday, 14th October 2004 @ 06:48:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Everything is running and flying and rushing and spinning and diving and crashing down into a nothingness that has just been going on for all eternity for me, which I will never understand.
And then this frenzy is stopped.
Immediately.
Without warning
The air turns to water,
we're all moving in slow motion,
suspended in this moment.
The truth revealed,
and I pray tomorrow never comes,
for today is just so beautiful.
And when it does come it is all running and flying and rushing and spinning and diving and crashing into something worse than a nothingness.
Into an emptiness from where such a grand glimmer of hope that was placed has now been wrenched from my very hands, before my very eyes.
And I fear the world has lost all consideration for people's feelings,
espicially the world of people who have led us to believe in this something so wonderful and then have taken it away,
like children playing selfishly with toys.
But I wouldn't play games with me, I can become much too enraged.
But believe me, I want to be on your side.
Now don't tell me it just can't be,
I've been hoping for this for much too long....................
Copyright ©
Juliet
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2004-10-14 18:48:08]
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Re: Suspended in this moment
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by Rxqueen on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 04:36:49 AM AEST
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| I liked the feel of this poem. It was frantic, yet calm. Good job. |
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Re: Suspended in this moment
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 10:57:34 PM AEST
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| this is pretty good. it seems rushed at times so u want to read it quickly and it just draws u in so much more. One thing though, a big pet peeve is mispelling. lol "especially" :p otherwise its good. |
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Re: Suspended in this moment
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 08:28:36 PM AEST
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| powerful write. |
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Re: Suspended in this moment
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by Archie on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 10:39:40 AM AEST
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| Broken promises can cause all sorts of strife. This is a very good write. I have missed your poetry but I have not forgotten you, friend. |
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