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The End And The Beginning
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
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Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 09:09:18 AM in AEST
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Time dies at the flight of your life on wings.
It's a bloodless path that you are slipping on
You lie prostate before yourself witnessing the dawn
A searing sun that parts its waiting lips and sings.
Will you pretend not to get lost in this last song?
Will you deny that your time left here is not long?
Everyone knows
This is the end and the beginning...
Denial dies when you finally wake from your dreaming.
The serpent in the river tries to swallow all its lies
The angel on the bank tries to pass on its last fireflies
In your last moments, no one blesses you with their weeping.
Your heart was more arctic than stone, a home for deadened eyes
As you near your fate, you taste a tear and claim your final sigh
Everyone knows
This is the end and the beginning...
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 09:11:55 AM AEST
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a great dark write,
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 09:14:15 AM AEST
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| A beautifully awesome write, so dark and mezmerising, very visual images, and astounding style, cool poem. |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by arden on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 09:18:25 AM AEST
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all i can say is "Damn"...
this was so awesome, very powerful and very dark. i liked this poem alot. it made me think, i read it over a few times and it just gets even more powerful with each read. greatly written. you've got alot of talent and you know how to use it well.
5 stars
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by brew on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 09:35:20 AM AEST
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| Deep ..........yet to the point. Well thought. |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 09:35:36 AM AEST
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Dark, but perhaps a warning with some hope as well?
Very thought provoking write!
Well done! |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Ronald on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 09:57:43 AM AEST
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| Hey, been scrutinizing your page for a while and finaly you're back!! I got so excited when I saw you posted another poem. That's great! This poem is definitely a great masterpiece from you and I love it. It's a great reminder to us all to live our life to the fullest. Reminds me of a song entitled 'Our Lives' by The Calling. Great write!! |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 10:06:56 AM AEST
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| as ever and always your poetry is excellent! |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 11:19:20 AM AEST
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This is an excellent poem. A true honor to read. Very high quality.
Kie |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 02:00:46 PM AEST
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A highly recommended read from Ronald ... I can see why. Amazing write. Wow !!!
Nazmythian ~
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 02:42:27 PM AEST
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Wow. This is most definitely worth a forum of it's own. This has almost a sonnet-type structure to it, and it holds the reader locked in position throughout.
My favorite line(s):
"The serpent in the river tries to swallow all its lies
The angel on the bank tries to pass on its last fireflies"
Excellently crafted poem, and worthy of being called a masterpiece. Awesome job of conveying a deep and meaningful message in a powerful way.
Reaching the end of the beginning,
-V.S. |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 03:36:27 PM AEST
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wow this is poetry at its best. This was
beautiful and really makes the reader search
his/her heart. I loved it all and it didn't really
strike me as dark just a straight up great
poem. Thnx for sharing this.
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 03:47:32 PM AEST
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| Great write. I was very impressed by your themes and truth. |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 06:37:08 PM AEST
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Sometimes, I read and am struck by the power in the words, reading it over and over again to drink in each drop . This is one of those times. Dark... yes... but full of a truth of life.
Very VERY well done
Dark Roses
Larry
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by CrimsonTears on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 10:20:51 PM AEST
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awesome write!!!! i absolutely loved it...great work...
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Hurretje on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 02:18:04 AM AEST
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This is a deep piece of work that breathes a wise insight... I enjoyed reading it.
Hugs,
Hur |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 06:24:34 AM AEST
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| Truly dark and profound poem you have written..... I truly love it. You are without a doubt my favorite poet. Awesome poem!!!! |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 01:47:57 AM AEST
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I am another who read this multiple times. You drew me in with the note at the top and held me, spellbound, for quite a while. (The note, by the way... I think I would like to have seen it in the poem... just my two cents).
Like a few others, I must say - I don't find this dark at all. Deep, yes - thought provoking, of course... but not dark. It is, simply.... truth.
Well, well done!
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 20th October 2004 @ 12:15:24 AM AEST
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| very dark and powerful..very brilliant thought provoking..absolutely beautiful write..:-) venkat |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by emystar on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 06:47:25 PM AEST
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Luv your concept here.
Good work.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 03:10:11 AM AEST
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Deep and powerful, this is an excellent piece, well done.
Johnny. |
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Re: The End And The Beginning
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by blueheart on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 10:50:59 PM AEST
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II'm so lucky to have read this. Truly a work of art and such a masterclass high above the rest.
Amazing work. |
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