|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
The Doll
Contributed by
Sirena_Degana
on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 07:44:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
|
Wrapped in plastic,
you open me up.
Distinguished features.
So cleverly defined.
Poised perfectly in
your hands.
Here I am.
You think you can dress me,
polish me up.
Mold me in your hands.
Steer my attitude
to blossom at your feet.
You watch me walk
and tell me how to talk.
I stay closed up
in this cardboard box.
Hoping you will decease.
Stop looking at me.
I'm not yours to bottle up.
You can't play with me
anymore.
Copyright ©
Sirena_Degana
... [
2004-10-11 19:44:35]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: The Doll
(User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 08:43:18 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| good write. very interesting. |
|
|
Re: The Doll
(User Rating: 1 )
by hellsfallenangel on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 02:13:02 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
nice poem. I have on ? do u think im insane?
well g2g bye
DEMON |
|
|
Re: The Doll
(User Rating: 1 )
by fayeelizibeth on
Wednesday, 30th May 2007 @ 10:08:44 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| i like the little rhyme at the end of the secound stanza, it kinda surprices you because there is no other rhyming anywhere, just there, it moves you along. also, the imagry is quite nice and strong, and a feeling many people have experienced, to have someone trying to mold them into something they aren't, but i hope it does not make you fearful of leaving your 'cardboard box'. thank you. |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
