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2-clouds in rains(poem)
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cauchy3
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Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 04:01:23 AM in AEST
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2-clouds in rains (poem)
To prefer the rains would change the clouds
Defect of bloods in tastes of bouts
Detest for eyes in eyes are our images
Repair of loves are shameful to be on airs
Tilts have subsided horses that are tired
Climb on back of steels and the times
Strong legs on stilts that are wilted
Human uses wits to balance wills
Connect to skies to blow with clouds
Political men are real hunters
Stones are weapons but bricks are bums
Floods are wastes as tides for lumps
Plums are quarrels as primes to succumbs
What is the principals that over the rules
Tastes the foods but on clouds you soared
Red your lips with bloods and oaths
Swear to young and kiss the asked
The rains are beefs but clouds are arms
Your lips are red and lilies are white
White washes are rains but fine
Launder your cape with moneys in rains
Regimens are clouds but lives are trained
Are those tracts run to utopia
Up to dates are fashions on tops
Country is not steel but bananas in stacks
Pending clouds pour water in shames
Rains are not grey because red are bloods
Despots have arms for peoples in boots
Eyes are blurred on rains courses
Minds are washed like oils and popcorns
Rains are cold clouds are shadows
Lives are many symbols in shades
--------Poem by Cheung Shun Sang=cauchy3-------
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Re: 2-clouds in rains(poem)
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by EternitysLyre on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 04:36:10 AM AEST
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In most situations I refrain from commenting on the works that utterly escape my understanding, but in an odd way, this befuddling little peice echoed of my second language--Chinese. Are you, by any chance, a speaker of an asian langauge? The grammar is almost reminiscient of the spoken word I hear each day. If that's true, I'd honestly--and humbly--suggest you find a better program to translate your poem. It sounds like it was something beautiful in chinese--and now it sounds like it's still in Chinese.
Unique.
"He blinked away the sorry days and slept away his fear; In vagrant times his rubble rhymes bereft him of his tears."
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Re: 2-clouds in rains(poem)
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 05:14:37 AM AEST
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| Intirguing way of writing about, sounded like the pouring of emotions, and the many shades of feelings, cool poem. |
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