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Faded pale
Contributed by
Hurretje
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Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 03:17:38 AM in AEST
Topic:
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No more dark and real
See the moaning Moon
Hear the shivering stars
No more this dim appeal
Feel the weeping Earth
Smell your withering scars
No longer this eternal bliss
Filled with my wicked fire
No longer this devouring kiss
Feeding my foul desire
Hold me, behold me as I fade
In the twentyfour-hour day
Give me, forgive me, dying shade
As right now, I'll have to pay
Years of ignored condemnation
Stronger than the reaping scythe of Death
I have shown such adaptation
But soon I'll bend for my last screamed breath
Buried in the pages of a book
My memory becomes faded pale
Dusted in a nanny and a crook
My history's naught but a fairy tale
Copyright ©
Hurretje
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2004-10-11 03:17:38]
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Re: Faded pale
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 05:30:12 AM AEST
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| History maybe, fairy tale who knows, but a poem I enjoyed reading none the less. cheers for sharing. |
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Re: Faded pale
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by pixie on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 05:54:34 AM AEST
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great poem, great flow,
pixie xx |
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Re: Faded pale
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 06:50:59 AM AEST
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something to get my teeth into! (God my jokes get worse)
well wriiten work well done.
wildejohnny. |
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Re: Faded pale
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by bernard on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 06:56:24 AM AEST
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| Good solid poem as usual. Not quite the poetry that I really enjoy a little too dismal perhaps. The wording is good from bernard |
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Re: Faded pale
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by thumper on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 08:03:10 AM AEST
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"No longer this devouring kiss
Feeding my foul desire"
OOO I likeee. (LOL)
Great write, Hur! Gave me the heebie-jeebies!
Thanks for sharing.
Peace to ya!
Thumps ; 0) |
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Re: Faded pale
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 10:34:36 AM AEST
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| Hur, I liked this style of writing. Keep penning on my friend. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Faded pale
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by Remy on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 08:34:29 PM AEST
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good job, nice to see a vampire write... been awhile...
-smelly_man! |
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Re: Faded pale
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 02:29:40 AM AEST
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| excellent imagery..greatly sensuous and also heart breaking...wonderful work..:-) venkat |
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Re: Faded pale
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by inoc on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 08:02:28 AM AEST
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I really enjoyed this poem ...
the way you wrote it...
the way it read...
everything
cheers!~ |
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Re: Faded pale
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by Stitch on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 10:45:16 AM AEST
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Vampires live around us every day...maybe they even are us. I like how this can be read on two levels. Nice stuff.
Stitch |
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Re: Faded pale
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 10:44:22 PM AEST
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This one tugs at the reader, Hurretje... and I suspect we'll all find our own meaning in it. I've read it several times, got lost somewhere inside it - and only after a long while, found my way to an exit.
Wonderfully thought provoking and beatifully crafted.... thanks for sharing this piece,
SNM |
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Re: Faded pale
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 04:45:44 AM AEST
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| Nice! You been reading Anne Rice or something? This reminds me of that...I can imagine the images very vividly, it's dark yet ethereal. Excellent write :) |
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Re: Faded pale
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 06:43:00 PM AEST
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Excellent piece. The grim, dark feeling was protrayed well.
Nice bit to think on, too. Good work, my friend.
Andrew |
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