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ME AND MY SHADOW
Contributed by
chereid
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Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 08:09:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
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At the break of dawn,
He comes calling every morn,
“Che! Che! It’s time to play!”
Let’s ride your bike and scooter today.
Brush your teeth and have your tea,
Then we’ll ask Aunty to take us to the sea.
When we get back, we’ll bathe in the pool,
Have some more fun and play the fool.
After that, a game of football,
Is what we’ll play before Aunty’s call.
“It’s time for lunch, boys!
Please put away all your toys!”
My shadow follows me everywhere I go,
I hate it but I don’t let it show.
He is only five
And lucky to be alive,
Me… soon I will be eight…
So I get up and open the gate!
By: Che Reid
12.02.02
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chereid
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Re: ME AND MY SHADOW
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by emystar on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 08:12:52 PM AEST
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Very good writing for aa seven year old.
at seven u was already writing like a professional.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: ME AND MY SHADOW
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by Katie2008 on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 08:27:34 PM AEST
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This is great, you're very talented, this write is so cute!
Katie |
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Re: ME AND MY SHADOW
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 09:07:00 PM AEST
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Well he did get a little help with the structure...*wink* ..but the ideas were all his and most of the rhymes.
Hugs for my sunshine....
Aunty Jenny
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Re: ME AND MY SHADOW
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by Spazzo on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 10:06:23 PM AEST
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| Great poem. You did pretty good to have been 7. |
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Re: ME AND MY SHADOW
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by Nicole_Rahaman on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 07:23:23 AM AEST
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If that shadow is anything like you.... then he is a good one... love ya
Nicole |
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Re: ME AND MY SHADOW
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by Mick_Puttock on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 04:48:35 PM AEST
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This is great Che, you just remember to make sure you have fun each day, its the best part of life. (and dont let that aunt get in the way lol !)
Loved the way you put this, I could just imagine you speaking as I was reading.
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Re: ME AND MY SHADOW
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by jonteD on
Wednesday, 20th October 2004 @ 04:13:56 PM AEST
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| Hey, top work Che - let's have some more of the same. |
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Re: ME AND MY SHADOW
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by Dorkfish on
Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 12:34:10 PM AEST
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| Wow, you wrote that at 7? That's better than most of my stuff! You are very talented. Keep it up! |
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Re: ME AND MY SHADOW
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by The_Phantom on
Thursday, 30th November 2006 @ 06:07:27 PM AEST
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Well done, you have alot of talent for such a young one, well done again, I do hope to more of your work.
The Phantom |
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