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Incinerating
Contributed by
screwup
on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 01:06:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I'm burning in this pain
a knife, I need to obtain
keep it locked up inside
I have no one to confide
lived a lie
I've got to die
last smile to fake
the last line to make
last time you will hear my voice
this was my only choice
love me when I'm gone
cause it won't be long
incinerating, looking in your eyes
as my heart dies
when you find me
you finally see
the blood is everywhere... splattered
this body... truly battered
the 45 still in my hand
and then you ran
I promise it was all you
not a question of who
why I am lying here dead
blood all around my bed
Copyright ©
screwup
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2004-10-10 13:06:52]
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Re: Incinerating
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by pixie on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 01:09:44 PM AEST
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well expressed suicide write, you have a way with words, I really like it,
pixie xx |
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Re: Incinerating
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by Quilted_rag_doll on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 02:08:37 PM AEST
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very nice.
lived a lie
I've got to die
last smile to fake
the last line to make
thats was one of my fave parts. very good write.
¤~::.. a n d e ..::~¤ |
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Re: Incinerating
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by kidpoet_213 on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 03:18:39 PM AEST
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Hey babe... once again...
Certainly an impressive write... u do have a way with words... Just don't give up hope on me okay... I'm never gonna give up on u! Take care...
~Donna~ |
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Re: Incinerating
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 01:12:48 AM AEST
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Well expressed indeed, but I feel the need to
do more than just smile, pat you on the head,
and send you on your way. I know the pain
expressed in this poem is REAL. I know how
debilitating and how hopeless you can feel.
My heart goes out to you. Never give in, be
strong writing shows how strong you are. PM
me if u want to talk.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Incinerating
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by tractorbabe on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 09:24:40 PM AEST
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| Very Very good u are talented |
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