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Get out
Contributed by
aud
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Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 12:13:29 PM in AEST
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get out
laying here
staring at the same 4 walls
throw in a rock record
nothing to do but, ***** in my eyes
my heart beats faster and faster...when i hear the footseps. closer
crying
wishing i'd die
sieze the moment, try to hold it.
but i keep falling and failing.
i thought i've hit rock botom
everyday gets worse
trying to escape this broken home
never ending..never ending..never ending
just another stastic.
you will never stop me
you cant stop me
Copyright ©
aud
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2004-10-09 12:13:29]
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Re: Get out
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by a_bear on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 12:43:08 PM AEST
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| No, it isn't dumb...good in fact. heart felt, painful..making your readers feel the pain. Far cry from dumb. |
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Re: Get out
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by n2dep2care on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 12:46:16 PM AEST
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Emotional, passionate and powerful. Nice write!
Laurie |
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Re: Get out
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by Quilted_rag_doll on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 01:02:35 PM AEST
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'sieze the moment, try to hold it.
but i keep falling and failing.'
i like those two lines alot! pretty good for your first one. keep it up!
¤~::.. a n d e ..::~¤ |
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Re: Get out
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 12:58:09 AM AEST
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| great write. i always thought the rock bottom theory was interesting. it seems that when you get from back up from rock bottom youre worried about getting there again...just a cycle... |
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