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The Arrow
Contributed by
ronald
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Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 04:39:09 AM in AEST
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Have you ever been burned deep,
Felt like you are turning into ashes,
Consumed by the amber fire of fury,
Burning like a fiery world of hell,
As you begin to direct the arrow towards,
Your alleged spell caster of the spell,
Who is anyone but yourself?
Have you ever felt like the arrow,
Causes all the doors around to begin,
To slam shut, locked perpetually,
And you stand firm on your ground,
Pushing aside the senses within you,
Hoping that you will not be found,
Again, by your annoying rational mind?
Have you ever felt that later the world,
Consists of only and soley judges,
Assisted by their sight, the juries,
Who paint your life with their verdict,
Of the horrendous choice of colours,
And you live in the habitat of a convict,
The empty room of a square?
Have you ever failed to seek an exit,
Failed to escape the bricked four walls,
Failed to point the arrow at someone else,
Failed to draw credibility to your 'truth',
Failed to make the echoed verdict invalid,
As you waste your life, all your youth,
Within the dimension of your misery?
Have you ever begun to question why,
All the uninvited parasitic creepers,
That eat your joy to satisfy their hunger,
Thrive well on the ground of your life,
Bringing your life from right to wrong,
Hurting your spirit worse than a knife,
Slowly, sucking life away from you?
Have you ever tried returning home,
To your senses that cries out to you,
And clear the clouds in your mind,
And begin to see clearly that the arrow,
That is acting like a child without a home,
As you hide away yourself in your sorrow,
Is actually looking to point at you?
And I think sometimes we humans,
Only look to pass the red hand,
To another whose hands...
Are not red...
And I know...
It runs in my blood too...
Copyright ©
ronald
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2004-10-09 04:39:09]
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Re: The Arrow
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by Archie on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 05:14:50 AM AEST
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| I think this is a very amazing poem. You use imagery to tell the story of the conscience well. In my opinion the arrow hits but its impact is diminished when we lesson it's affect. Great write!! |
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by shelby on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 05:26:11 AM AEST
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I liked this very unique nice flow excellant meanings behind it nicely done and crafted
Michelle |
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Re: The Arrow
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by Rxqueen on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 08:10:10 AM AEST
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| You totally gave me the chills! That was so real. I know exactly what you mean. It is so much easier to blame someone else. You will find a million excuses why... but in the end you will have to face the truth that it was all you. I really liked this work. |
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Re: The Arrow
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by emystar on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 12:41:49 AM AEST
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Very deep thought provoking write.
Keep up the good owrk.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: The Arrow
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 12:50:05 AM AEST
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BRAVO!BRAVO!BRAVO! FANTASTIC POEM Ronald..........so glad I have the privilege of reading it. You certainly know much about human nature, and yes, I've been there many times.......not having the courageous to confess.........then when I felt so guilty with remose, I decided it would be easier to the truth! Oh My how I loved this poem. You are so talented, and do you know what else is simply MARVELOUS??? You have the knowledge to go with it!
Thanking you so much for commenting on my "Happy" Poem.......you will see me more often!!! I love your poetry!
Lovincritters
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Re: The Arrow
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by SocialMisfit on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 08:42:49 AM AEST
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nicely done, i love the wording and language used in this poem, had good flow and shows deep insight into human nature, its just good in all aspects thanks for sharing.
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Re: The Arrow
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by venkat on
Thursday, 14th October 2004 @ 02:24:56 AM AEST
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| well written.really thought provoking human feelings..:-) venkat |
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Re: The Arrow
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 12:45:33 AM AEST
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an excellent poem, so real, unfortunatly i have been there; fortunatly i always find an exit:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: The Arrow
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by Avarice_Riot on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 01:19:44 AM AEST
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| Whoa.The magnitude of this poem is stunning!I love every word of it,and I can definitely relate to it. Kudos to you,my friend,for coming up with such a great piece :) |
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Re: The Arrow
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 17th October 2004 @ 01:39:58 AM AEST
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Hoping that you will not be found,
Again, by your annoying rational mind?
The logical mind can be a scary thing. It is usually in the wee hours, when the clutter of life slips away that I realize the arrow was meant for me.... and you're right, we usually don't want to admit it let alone see it.
Interesting piece... insightful and thought provoking. Keep writing....
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