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Something Isn't Right
Contributed by
Kie-Kie
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Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 06:12:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Something isn't right
What could it be?
I should just be happy
Not full of misery
Something isn't right
It's tearing me apart
Could it be my family?
Or matters of the heart?
Something isn't right
Why is my mind so dim?
Shouldn't I be happy?
Shouldn't I think of him?
Something isn't right
He's not who I think of
My mind's on someone else
One who I used to love
Something isn't right
I should let my past go
So we can both move on
So our loves can grow
Something isn't right
I just can't let that be
How can it be possible
For my past to still mean the world for me?
Copyright ©
Kie-Kie
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2004-10-08 18:12:21]
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Re: Something Isn't Right
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 06:30:01 PM AEST
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| You're right Kie; it is. I went through that for a long time myself. You put it just right. |
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Re: Something Isn't Right
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by Katie2008 on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 06:30:41 PM AEST
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Wow, I love this. I feel the exact same way. Why does love do this? It shouldn't be that way. *sigh* good luck! Great poem.
Katie |
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Re: Something Isn't Right
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by Yousef on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 07:13:56 PM AEST
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| A very good poem, but aren't we all feel that "Something isn't right" even if everything is very right?! the idea is so real, we all feel that somehow, and the finale say it all "I just can't let that be, How can it be possible, For my past to still mean the world for me?", Fantastic finale, really is, Keep it up and Good luck. |
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Re: Something Isn't Right
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by Dorian on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 10:00:44 PM AEST
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great rhythum, well written, and filled with lots of
ambiguity, u r good, as 4 love, one way or
another it all works out, just keep writting, your on
the right track . . . good luck . . . Dorian : ) |
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Re: Something Isn't Right
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by pixie on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 06:28:17 AM AEST
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love can be sooo confusing, it is never straight forward, very good write, well written and expressed,
pixie xx |
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Re: Something Isn't Right
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by sweetangeluk on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 10:15:08 AM AEST
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Could have written this one myself Kie.
Related to this one.
It is so hard to forget the past but the past is sometimes best left as a memory.
All will become right one day for you will truly find what it is you are looking for.
A great poem Kie
Love Sweetangelukxxx
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Re: Something Isn't Right
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by O7NeVeS on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 02:08:54 PM AEST
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| Oh how i can relate to this one!! Great job! Tanya |
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