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alone (help me)
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Thursday, 7th October 2004 @ 10:54:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
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my hands are achingly empty
(they should be holding others
others like them)
clutching only the lonely dust
of a broken something
that i've forgotten
painful "remember whens"?
shared with myself
no one left
to hear these broken words
these words that just turn into tears
these tears that just leave me
a little more empty
than i was before
(as long as i can hear the tears
softly slap the floor
i'm ok
because i know i'm still alive
but i fear the day
when my eyes finally dry
for with no tears
and no one left
to validate my existence
there will be no reassurance
that i'm even real at all)
the darkness coils tighter
the circle of soft light grows smaller
and from every rounded corner
i can hear the heavy breathing
of the madness that never really left
if you can still hear me
(and, god, i hope you can)
i really need you now
(feels like i'm drifting)
don't let go, please
(drowning)
help me
(alone)
hello?
...hello?
Copyright ©
Cancer
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2004-10-07 22:54:40]
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Re: alone (help me)
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by Kie-Kie on
Thursday, 7th October 2004 @ 11:06:13 PM AEST
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BEautiful write...I can totally relate
Love YA'll,
~Kiela~ |
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Re: alone (help me)
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by thumper on
Thursday, 7th October 2004 @ 11:20:58 PM AEST
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This is really great! I totally feel this most of the time. Great write!! Powerful! Left me feeling lost and alone (which I feel most of the time anyways).
Peace
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Re: alone (help me)
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by eatfresh22 on
Thursday, 7th October 2004 @ 11:41:33 PM AEST
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Wow, this was great. It was a story hidden under a desperation of thoughts. Loneliness is the worst suffering of mankind. Wonderful and emotional. Nicely done,
~Carrie~ |
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Re: alone (help me)
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 01:51:47 AM AEST
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Roy you never cease to amaze me. I don't
know what to say about this poem its just so...
there are no words to describe it.
"i can hear the heavy breathing
of the madness that never really left"
This whole poem was just brilliance and
those two lines... wow... *hands him a cookie*
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: alone (help me)
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by wyrd_faerie on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 12:54:32 PM AEST
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oh, this is so, deeply, wonderful. makes me want to curl up and cry and cry and cry,wipe your tears away. the last stanza, and third to last, they are so gorgeous. reminds me of thoughts that just float across the mind...praying for salvation. i hope it finds you, soon. sometimes, there's saviour in the smallest of things. a red petal in a storm. rain.
****, what am i talking about? |
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