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Untitled (plz give me a sugestion for a title)
Contributed by
Pyrochick
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Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 08:21:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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I'm sitting on my bed
wondering if i've gone through your head
i trace my lips
with my finger tips
and remember our first kiss
the kiss that started all of this
the gentle touch of your lips to mine
the moment forever stuck in time
i remember the feeling of me melting in your arms
you had me hooked on your wonderful charms
even though the moment has past
the feeling of us still lasts
Copyright ©
Pyrochick
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2004-10-04 20:21:08]
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Re: Untitled (plz give me a sugestion for a title)
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by BlazeingHeart on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 08:41:52 PM AEST
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i think that you should call it a moment stuck in time
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Re: Untitled (plz give me a sugestion for a title)
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by SuperAsh16 on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 09:23:18 PM AEST
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| i agree on the previous title suggestion. great work. keep it up. i look forward to future writes from you. |
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Re: Untitled (plz give me a sugestion for a title)
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 09:40:13 PM AEST
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| Or melted kiss. Nice poem! |
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Re: Untitled (plz give me a sugestion for a title)
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 10:28:12 PM AEST
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| how bout "that first kiss"....its a wonderful poem. i know where your coming from. keep writing! peace n love. God bless. jenny |
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Re: Untitled (plz give me a sugestion for a title)
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 08:09:39 AM AEST
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| All good suugestions and a wonderful poem. How about "Still Wet Upon My Lips"......Mike |
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Re: Untitled (plz give me a sugestion for a title)
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by Yousef on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 03:22:17 PM AEST
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| A good poem, and about the tiltle, all those suggested are great and better than what I thought of, but I'll tell you what crossed my mind anyway, "I remember" and "It was just one kise". Good luck and keep it up. |
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