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Death 2
Contributed by
aallmmhh
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Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 09:32:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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As you lay there bleeding
Im sure you could barely hear my screaming
As I cried on your chest
When you were finally put to rest.
Whyd you go and leave me like that?
Sitting alone and feeling so bad
Knowing youll never, ever come back.
I know now, you were so self-absorbed,
The only opinion that mattered was yours
People loved you, and they always will
Giving that no recognition, yourself you killed.
Nothing can ever be the same
My whole life went down the drain
The only person who died was you?
Thats not right, now Im dead too.
You took all my feeling, or anything real
As you made the biggest mistake
Leaving so much unsaid,
Blindly leaving me to sit and wait....
...For you to never come back
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aallmmhh
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2004-09-30 21:32:49]
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Re: Death 2
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by Doriens_Picture on
Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 09:41:21 PM AEST
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awsome but the ends needed a bit of work in like
You took all my feeling, or anything real
As you made the biggest mistake
what gave you the right my life to steel
Blindly leaving me to sit and wait....
or something just my opinion |
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Re: Death 2
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by MiSS_B on
Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 09:57:37 PM AEST
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| i love ur poem mandy...vedy good |
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Re: Death 2
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by nintool3369 on
Friday, 1st October 2004 @ 08:47:41 PM AEST
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| hey don't listen to that ass hole that wants revision....poetry needs no revision...art is art and take it for what it is....and that's that....plus it's a good read anyho.... |
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