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For A Suicidal Friend (if I had one...)
Contributed by
eyesxcriedxout1989
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Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 03:57:47 PM in AEST
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Tears roll
Vibrating a dark harmony
Crescendo as they fall
But collapse into a soft piano
As they explode on the floor
Deep racking sobs
Escaping your cut-up form
Feeling as if you have been taken hostage
By your own mind
Drawing yourself away
From everyone you loved
They loved you, too
But you thought your mind
Was decieving you
We didn't love you
You thought...
Well, guess what
We did
And still do
But you still cry
I don't know what to do anymore
So I step forward
Pull you up to face me
I embrace you
And you collapse
Sobs deeper than before
Realizing you are loved
You look at me and smile
Happiness gleaming thgough flooded eyes
Another tear rolls down your cheek
This time, though
Vibrating into the sweetest melody
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2004-09-30 15:57:47]
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Re: For A Suicidal Friend (if I had one...)
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by poetmarie on
Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 04:04:54 PM AEST
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| Very nice - lovely. I think it captures the sentiment, the idea quite well. |
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Re: For A Suicidal Friend (if I had one...)
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by pixie on
Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 04:06:20 PM AEST
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wow so moving and wonderfully expressed, this is a brilliant piece of writing,
pixie xx |
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Re: For A Suicidal Friend (if I had one...)
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by kidpoet_213 on
Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 10:02:30 PM AEST
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Neat poem... I do have a suicidal... actually a few... this kinda helps... thanks for sharing...
great write...
~Donna~
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Re: For A Suicidal Friend (if I had one...)
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Friday, 1st October 2004 @ 05:45:07 PM AEST
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| this was another excellent write mason, your imagery here is so good, keep it up my man. |
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Re: For A Suicidal Friend (if I had one...)
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by AbnormalPunk on
Friday, 22nd October 2004 @ 05:29:04 PM AEST
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fasinating...you said you dont have a suicidal friend... well i do... and this is exactly what i would write to them.... (if i had the ability to write this well.... lol) keep em comin
jeremy |
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Re: For A Suicidal Friend (if I had one...)
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by russ-dawg on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 12:01:44 AM AEST
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| i had a suisidal friend but i did not what to do it scared me into thinking the same way but i snapped out of it i wish i could say the same for her! oh and that was a great poem keep writting! |
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