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Second Thoughts
Contributed by
playitforward
on
Tuesday, 12th November 2002 @ 04:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Ever felt that your life means less?
After you:
Make a mess,
Out of emotional stress.
And pop another,
Steal from mother,
To pay for your last supper
That you cant eat
Cant stand on your own damn feet
Cant breathe
Cant stay in your damn seat.
This damn heat
Almost to much to take
No more will to break
For late uncle’s sake
you smile to look fake
And find help in a pill
I know its hard to show skill
when J walking uphill.
I know its hard to ***** a 9
when jottn your will
But ***** life
Kuz that was the last piece
That goes to this puzzle
Pearly gates await inside of a 9 muzzle
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2002-11-12 04:00:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Second Thoughts
(User Rating: 1 ) by Catterpillar_Girl on
Tuesday, 12th November 2002 @ 05:32:21 AM AEST (User
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I liked your poem!!! I like rhyme. |
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Re: Second Thoughts
(User Rating: 1 ) by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Tuesday, 12th November 2002 @ 05:40:57 AM AEST (User
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Good write but don't rhyme so much that it loses it's meaning... to me the rhyme seems forced... but what do I know? you're the writer
write how you want... just my opinion. |
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Re: Second Thoughts
(User Rating: 1 ) by LOWMAN613 on
Tuesday, 12th November 2002 @ 05:45:48 AM AEST (User
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It's a good rhyming poem!I liked it! Christina |
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Re: Second Thoughts
(User Rating: 1 ) by OreO on
Tuesday, 12th November 2002 @ 06:55:51 AM AEST (User
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I enjoyed reading your poetry
Keep em' coming
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::. |
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