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Lust: A Health Issue?
Contributed by
xafflictedx
on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 07:54:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
insomniac
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Shimmering in a shallow pool of blood
Lies a locket.
A novelty heart claiming the lives
Of two lovers.
Smitten by their passions that blind
The senses until no one else exists.
Smear the lipstick and skew the collar.
The love fades to lust and
Selfish tendencies.
A wooden bat and a cleaver
Become the substitutes for a
Whisper.
A kind word.
There they are together again.
Not because they want to but
Bloodloss leads to unconciousness.
Two more hearts cease to beat
From the weight of tragedy.
Two more hearts are broken.
Copyright ©
xafflictedx
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2004-09-28 19:54:56]
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Re: Lust: A Health Issue?
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 04:08:34 PM AEST
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| you don't know where this came from my ass. this is about me and jennifer isn't it. well maybe not but it might be. andrew this was amazing and beautiful, tragic and gripping. this is one of your best poems. |
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Re: Lust: A Health Issue?
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by theMoth on
Wednesday, 6th October 2004 @ 04:33:39 PM AEST
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Dane is right,
more people should read you.
This is pretty unique, not
just a sentimental write,
there's alot to think about,
and your ideas and images
are very effective.
--Mothy |
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Re: Lust: A Health Issue?
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 09:36:12 PM AEST
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Wow I really really like this! Its definitely nothing like I've read before. I'm most certainly going to be checking back for more of your work. :)
The imagary is fantastic and provokes very strong emotions. |
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Re: Lust: A Health Issue?
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 09:03:47 PM AEST
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Dude, this was a truly great poem...everyone else said what I wanted, but I don't even know if I could come up with something that would do this poem justice. I'm kinda speechless at the moment...I seriously loved this poem
Mason |
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