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Purgatory Tears
Contributed by
Black13
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Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 11:45:14 AM in AEST
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One thousand tears I've cried,
and these bittersweet dreams
are tearing down everything I've ever tried
but nothing seems to drown out
my hearts tender screams.
Sometimes I swear I'm so much colder
when this place won't seem to let me go.
Though I know that I've grown older
it's just so hard to admit to what I know.
I can't seem to shed a tear for what I've done
it makes me feel like a monster deep inside.
I'm staring into the mirror at a clone
and he's staring back with eyes so cold,
and I hate him because I know he's me.
Sometimes I wish for silence
but I know that this is all I've earned.
In the darkness I pray that someone will save me
from this unfound way of life.
But is must be destiny
for me to walk this way alone.
Maybe tomorrow I'll try hard enough
to get myself out of this.
Don't cry for me if I should fail
because in death I may find a bit of bliss.
Something
I should have found in you.
Copyright ©
Black13
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by daisy4me7 on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 12:12:21 PM AEST
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| Your poem is different then what I have read so far on here. I noticed in the line,You will try harder. I believe that is your problem, You think that you can do it all on your own. You also wrote you pray that someone will save you. Why don't you let him.meaning God. Give it to him and let him do the work. And don't pick it back up,Once you give it to him. |
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 12:12:51 PM AEST
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wow this was an amazing emotional piece of writing Black13, very powerful words
pixie xx |
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by faith_my_eyes on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 12:46:59 PM AEST
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very powerful, Jeff. But you know what I'll say....
He's come and He is waiting.
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 01:11:10 PM AEST
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The last stanza struck a strong chord with me. Some of us go through life always thinking if we only try harder. George Orwell knew the concept well. Acceptance of self is both the hardest and the easiest step we might take, and no one can take it for you.
Nice write and nice to see you here.
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 01:15:52 PM AEST
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Jeff,
Very powerful piece! You have put yourself right there on the page, bared your soul.
I truely hope things get better for you. |
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 02:24:41 PM AEST
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jeff this is lovely
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 03:48:26 PM AEST
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Well, worth reading.
Thanks.
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 05:04:19 PM AEST
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Dark, hopeless, melancholy, depressingly poignant at parts...and overall, brilliant. Excellent work, great expression of scathing emotion. And that ending; all I can say is wow.
Stabbed in the spine with a pitch-fork,
-V.S. |
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 05:32:39 PM AEST
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| amazing. |
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 3rd October 2004 @ 02:31:22 AM AEST
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This is a good piece. Powerful, and the last stanza brought the punch home.
One thing I couldn't believe more, and that is that darkness doesn't hold forever. Life can tear at us, can pretty much leave nothing worth keeping, but even in doing so, perhaps something better is born, and waiting the opportunity to show itself. Maybe someday...
It's all maybes, sometimes.
Take care.
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by Ronald on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 11:25:18 PM AEST
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Maybe tomorrow I'll try hard enough
to get myself out of this.
Don't cry for me if I should fail
because in death I may find a bit of bliss.
Something
I should have found in you.
You will definitely find a way out of your troubles. :-) I love your poems so much!! |
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by Ronald on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 11:28:10 PM AEST
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Maybe tomorrow I'll try hard enough
to get myself out of this.
Don't cry for me if I should fail
because in death I may find a bit of bliss.
Something
I should have found in you.
You will definitely find a way out of your troubles. :-) I love your poems so much!! |
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Re: Purgatory Tears
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by MoonlitAngel on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 11:51:31 PM AEST
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Wow... I hadn't realized how long it's been since I checked your page. I like this... as usual, I can relate. Gonna go read the others now.
Dee |
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