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Snow Drop
Contributed by
Ryoko
on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 11:23:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Ploughed under rough water,
Ice planting the ground,
Growing tall in my skull,
White petals deadly revealed.
Book cover of black rims,
details of silver writting,
balance of plans unseen,
a dotted line of blood at my feet.
deceptive nights over shadow,
All the red trails on the floor,
covering your eyes with the same colour,
Only to be blinded by the dawn.
Manipulating the air around me,
forced to shape my obtruse body,
fearless memories reservice,
bringing a sadistic smile to my face.
orange patches stuck to my wall,
a deep hole in my floor,
a faint outline of a body,
i suddenly remember how i died.
photo's drawing my realistic attention,
the burnt corners folded up,
a sudden silver flash appears in the picture,
my insane Snow Drop, dead in the ground
Copyright ©
Ryoko
... [
2004-09-27 11:23:09]
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Re: Snow Drop
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by pixie on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 11:48:44 AM AEST
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a very powerful dark write, I really liked this one,
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: Snow Drop
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by katyqueen35 on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 03:23:00 PM AEST
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| Hmmm interesting write. |
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Re: Snow Drop
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by loopylou on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 11:47:47 AM AEST
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| This just kinda drags you in. i dont think i could stoped raeding this the way your words came together sounded like a spell and i was trully hypnotised. it leaves me feeling haunted. i liked it though especaily htis line"covering your eyes with the same colour" i liked the ending too. wow. chilling! |
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Re: Snow Drop
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 21st February 2005 @ 12:31:52 AM AEST
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| i am very impressed. |
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Re: Snow Drop
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st November 2006 @ 08:16:11 PM AEST
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| This is a very dark poem and thats why i love it! |
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