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Save Me
Contributed by
afraid_of_fear
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Saturday, 25th September 2004 @ 12:05:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The sky is darkening, threatening me with droplets of persecution
The walls are closing in, drawing nearer terrifying confinement
When will you come back to me?
Come back to me; I am nearing desperation
Come back my darling, kiss away all my resentment
Hands are tightening around my throat, I am becoming short of breath
Fear is facing me, confronting me, starting to throw me out of context
Will you save me?
Save me from a quick, lonely, painless death
Save me, and come with me for an eternity of rest; blessed
The stars are fading, crying meaningless dustmites
My future is disappearing with these red marbles falling from my wrists
The past is shadowing me; blinding lights
I need to fly without falling, held and kissed
For who I am, for who I might be
Will you love me?
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Re: Save Me
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by pixie on
Saturday, 25th September 2004 @ 12:15:41 PM AEST
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ohhh very dark, deep and filled with emotions
pixie xx |
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Re: Save Me
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by willow_tara72002 on
Saturday, 25th September 2004 @ 12:24:41 PM AEST
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| I like this poem,. The way you talked bout you need that person to save you,.. least thats what i got from it,. Great write |
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Re: Save Me
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 26th September 2004 @ 12:18:26 PM AEST
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oh charlotte this is excellent, vivid, filled with lonely longing, super write:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Save Me
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 04:46:13 PM AEST
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wow, very good!
Nice imagery, dark with bits of fear and hope.
Well done! |
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Re: Save Me
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by saha on
Friday, 1st October 2004 @ 12:13:56 PM AEST
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| hey! brilliant write. bring a tear in my eye. |
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Re: Save Me
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 1st October 2004 @ 06:33:13 PM AEST
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You write from a very lonely place... a place i
have been at many times. I loved the
rhetorical questions in this it, to me at least,
showed some hope despite the encroaching
sadness. A beautiful poem and this line really
stuck out to me: "My future is disappearing with these red marbles falling from my wrists"
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Save Me
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by BuTTerFly_LoVe on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 08:52:59 AM AEST
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| awww this is a great write, i feel they never come back love doesn't really exist in their heart so seek it some where else even tho you loved them so much.. the past like you said is a shadow so are a shadow of pain or a shadow of joy.. Pain can always be held joy goes on with you're life till forever.. |
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